Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to request you about getting a permission to enroll in six month training course, and I saw advertisement about this course recently in a magazine.

I want to do the Computer Accounting course, whose classes are starting from next month September 1st. This course is not only related to field, but also it would provide some information about data entries, data maintenance, and storage of distinct types data files.

I have been working as a User Support Technician in your company name Best Choice Auto Parts for last one year. I would appreciate your efforts and support, if some flexible working house could be allowed to me while the duration of my course. So that I can concentrate on my study properly.

Fortunately, this course would help me boost my knowledge regarding the handling of data with more accuracy, which would be beneficial for my current job because I do lots of such tasks where I need to organize the record of customers in an effective way, resulting in boost my performance also.

I look forward hearing from you a positive response.

Yours faithfully,

Manisha.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly describe the Computer Accounting course, explain the need for flexible working hours, and justify the course's relevance to your current role. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, while you mention the course content, providing more specific details about how it aligns with your daily tasks would strengthen the response. The purpose of the letter is clear throughout, and the requirements of the task are fully met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices such as 'not only... but also', 'fortunately', and 'so that', which help connect ideas. However, the transitions between some sentences feel slightly mechanical. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the flow between sentences is smoother. Overall, the paragraphing is appropriate and the progression of ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You use a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message effectively. Phrases like 'User Support Technician' and 'boost my knowledge' are relevant to the context. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'request you about getting a permission' (should be 'request permission') and 'flexible working house' (should be 'hours'). Additionally, 'distinct types data files' is missing a preposition. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Expanding your range of professional terminology would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you successfully use some complex sentences, there are persistent grammatical errors. For example, 'I saw advertisement' lacks an article, 'whose classes are starting' is slightly awkward, and 'resulting in boost my performance' should be 'resulting in a boost to my performance'. There are also issues with prepositions and articles throughout the text. Despite these errors, the meaning remains clear, and the grammar does not significantly impede the reader's understanding. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and article usage will help improve your accuracy.

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