Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to apply for a training course that I saw recently in an advertisement .

The course that I want to do for around one year it was dry needling course for my sports injury patient to heal as quickly as its a adavnce technique to rehabilitate my patient . The course duration is around one week.

This technique will hepfull to the musculosketal injured patient rapidly in one or two session . Also this will helpfull in my multidiscipilinary clinic as I learn this technique to gain multiple patient at my clinic.

Furthermore, this course will be useful for my clinic in multiple ways as I am the first in my area to learn this advance technique so it will attract the patient to come at our clinic .

Thank you for kind attention to this matter ,

Your Faithfully,

Kinjal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: describing the course, explaining the company's role, and justifying the utility of the training. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. The description of the course is slightly confusing, as you mention it is 'around one year' but then state it is 'around one week'. This inconsistency makes the nature of the training unclear. To improve, ensure that your ideas are fully developed and logically consistent. While you have covered the requirements, the lack of detail regarding how the company should specifically help (e.g., funding or time off) prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organized into short paragraphs, which is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'Also' and 'Furthermore', but the transitions between sentences are occasionally abrupt. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing the course duration. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus. The overall structure is logical, but the flow between sentences needs more refinement to achieve a higher level of coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several spelling errors and word-choice issues that hinder precision. For example, 'adavnce' (advanced), 'hepfull' (helpful), 'musculosketal' (musculoskeletal), and 'multidiscipilinary' (multidisciplinary) are misspelled. Additionally, the phrase 'gain multiple patient' is not natural collocation; 'attract more patients' would be more appropriate. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary related to your field, the frequent spelling errors and limited range of vocabulary prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading your work to catch these basic errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('this will helpfull'), missing articles ('in a multidisciplinary clinic'), and awkward phrasing ('it was dry needling course'). The sentence structure is often repetitive, and the punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction and ensure that verbs and articles are used correctly. Increasing your control over complex sentences will help you move to a higher band, but accuracy must be the priority at this stage.

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