Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

Hope this letter finds you well.

My name is Waqas Shaikh, working in your company as a data analyst, I have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for my job to enhance my skills as a data analyst. I feel after doing this course quality of my work will be improved and I can manage the things in short time as well.

For that, there is a letter required from the company. I have been working here since last five years and you already know my passion regarding my work. I am always punctual and hardly take leave this shows the sincere of me towards my work.

Furthermore, this course will help in many ways. I can do my job efficiently. I can help the company to gain more profit and attract more costumers. This course is beneficial for me as well as for company. I would appreciate if you help me with this. Waiting to get positive response from you.

Thank you in advance.

Yours faithfully,

Assistant manager,

Data analyst,

Waqas Shaikh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: describing the course, explaining the company's role, and detailing the benefits. However, the description of the course is quite vague; you mention it is for a 'data analyst' but do not provide specific details like the course name, duration, or content. To reach a higher band, you should provide more concrete information to make your request more persuasive. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the structure could be more professional by clearly separating the purpose of the letter from the specific request.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your request. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Phrases like 'For that' and 'Furthermore' are used, but the transitions between ideas could be smoother. Additionally, the sign-off is slightly confusing; you have included your job title and name in a way that does not follow standard formal letter conventions. Improving the flow between sentences and using a wider variety of linking words would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your request, but the word choice is often basic or slightly inaccurate. For example, you use 'sincere of me' instead of 'sincerity' and 'manage the things' which is quite informal. There is also a lack of precision in describing the course and its benefits. To improve, focus on using more professional collocations and precise terminology related to your field of work rather than relying on general, everyday language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include article usage ('in short time' instead of 'in a short time'), preposition errors ('since last five years' instead of 'for the last five years'), and word form errors ('sincere of me'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency of the writing. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage will help improve your accuracy.

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