Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to express my desire to pursue an online program of Power BI which I saw in the advertisement.

This course includes basic to advance level of skill set with hands-on practical projects that allow me to experience real problems at the organizations and assisting to develop problem-solving skills. Since this also offers extensive training after completion, I can easily find solutions of doubt in the future.

In recent years, the company introduced incentives to learn new skills, as a part of it I filled the form. However, the fee is more than allocated budget. Therefore, I require to get a detailed letter from organization, which provides me a cushion pay the course-fee.

As we know that company consist of poor data for more than four years, this skills help me to build system which enhance the way of storing data. Additionally, it help us to build dashboards for a various departments to get information in a minute.

I am looking forward to a positive response from your side.

Kind regards,

Dhruvish Panchal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: describing the course, explaining the company's role, and detailing the benefits. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed. For instance, when you mention the company's 'poor data', it is a bit vague; explaining how the course specifically addresses this would have strengthened the response. Additionally, the request for financial support could be more clearly articulated to sound more professional. Overall, the message is clear and the purpose of the letter is achieved.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the task. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally' and 'Therefore' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. For example, the transition in the third paragraph ('as a part of it I filled the form') is slightly abrupt and lacks a smooth connection to the previous clause. Referencing is generally clear, but some sentences could be better connected to improve the overall progression of your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'incentives', 'allocated budget', and 'dashboards'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'cushion pay' (should be 'cushion to pay') and 'company consist of poor data' (should be 'company has had poor data'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over collocations and prepositional usage. Expanding your vocabulary to include more sophisticated professional phrasing would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical slips throughout the text, such as 'I require to get' (should be 'I would like to request'), 'this skills help me' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'it help us' (should be 'it helps us'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To reach a higher band, you should focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of infinitive versus gerund structures after specific verbs.

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