Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Madam,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing a letter to express my thoughts regarding the training course, which is very helpful for my job.

I have seen an advertisement for a training course. I would like to enroll in the " How to improve communication course. It helps me improve my job, as I am not a good communicator, and in this course I will learn all aspects of communication and how I can become a good negotiator.

It would be very helpful for me if the company give some leave to do this course because we have enough staff to cover mt work.

There are plenty of benefits to taking this course. It will help me to do better leadership in the company, so we would have more productivity in the company because good communication helps to drive company growth.

Your answer will be appreciated

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: describing the course, requesting company support, and explaining the benefits. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, the description of the course is vague, and the request for leave is phrased in a slightly informal and repetitive manner. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific details about the course content (e.g., duration, provider, or specific modules) and elaborate more professionally on how the skills gained will directly impact your daily tasks. The tone is generally appropriate for a business letter, though it could be more formal.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, each focusing on a specific requirement of the prompt. There is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the request and the justification. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Phrases like 'There are plenty of benefits' and 'It will help me' are used repeatedly. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases to connect your sentences more fluidly, such as 'Furthermore,' 'Consequently,' or 'In addition to this.'

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic terms like 'good' and 'help,' which limits the impact of your writing. While you successfully communicate your message, there is little evidence of less common or idiomatic vocabulary. To improve, focus on using more precise business-related terminology. For instance, instead of saying 'I am not a good communicator,' you could use 'I wish to refine my interpersonal skills' or 'enhance my professional communication proficiency.'

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The letter contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'the company give some leave' (should be 'gives') and 'do better leadership' (should be 'demonstrate better leadership'). Additionally, there is a typo in 'mt work.' While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and proofreading for minor slips to improve your accuracy.

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