Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear, sir/ Madam

I am writing to tell you about an adversitement which is provided training course by international company for new applicants, which is based on sales and marketing.

To begin with , as I finish my diploma in last month , This is two year diploma based on sales and marketing. As a fresher, don't know about this job market besides theory , i have not any partical experience . I seen this traning course through advertisement, that is relevant for further job.

The traning course is meaningful for me.This is because, they are providing a number of stargery to convince to customers about their product. This can assist me alot for job stability in long run.

This course is offered a huge benefit including discount beyond their local insitiues and provides professional staff while sitting at home . This second benefits choosing a schedule according to my comfort zone

Your Faithfully

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: describing the course, explaining how the company can help, and stating the benefits for your job. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For instance, you mention the company could help, but you do not explicitly ask for support, such as time off or financial assistance, which is expected in a formal request to a manager. The tone is also inconsistent; while it is a formal letter, the language used is often informal or unclear, which affects the overall impact of your request.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is divided into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'To begin with' is used to start the second paragraph, but it does not logically follow the introduction. There are also issues with referencing; the connection between sentences is sometimes weak, making the flow of ideas feel disjointed. The transition between the description of the course and the benefits is abrupt, and the lack of clear logical progression between sentences hinders the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'adversitement' (advertisement), 'partical' (practical), 'stargery' (strategy), and 'insitiues' (institutes). Additionally, word choice is often imprecise, such as 'stargery to convince to customers' instead of 'strategies to persuade customers'. You rely on basic vocabulary, and there is little evidence of an attempt to use more sophisticated or topic-specific language related to professional training or business contexts. To improve, you should focus on accurate spelling and expanding your range of business-related collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'as I finish my diploma in last month' (should be 'finished'), 'i have not any partical experience' (should be 'I do not have any practical experience'), and 'This course is offered a huge benefit' (should be 'This course offers'). Your sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors in verb tense, article usage, and word order. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly in the salutation and the closing, which affects the formal tone required for this task.

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