Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to get a permission to enroll in the workshop of Certified orthopedic manual therapy (COMT).

This workshop includes the detail version of Mulligan approach, which considered the best across the world for physiotherapy treatment, and Mackenzie concept of assessment. They will assign dummies so that we would analysis and practice our skills before get ready for treating the real patients.

It will conduct for 10 days straight and for that I want a special permission from you to consider these leaves as an educational leaves. Apart from this, I want to use my allocated education allowance on it, so that the burden of the cost will reduce.

In our branch, there is a no-one to have knowledge regarding this modern treatment approach, and by learning it will help me to execute more accurate treatment. This will help us to improve the feedbacks from the patients and make us more competitive in the current era.

I would be delighted to help, if you have any questions regarding this.

Yours faithfully,

John.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: describing the course, explaining the company's role, and justifying the course's utility. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention the course content, you could have provided more specific details on how the 'Mulligan approach' directly benefits your specific daily tasks. The request for leave and funding is clear, but the overall structure could be more persuasive to ensure a positive outcome from your manager.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Apart from this' and 'In our branch' to transition between ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words. The referencing is generally clear, though the sentence 'I would be delighted to help, if you have any questions regarding this' is a bit abrupt as a closing statement and could be better integrated into the final paragraph.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using subject-specific terms like 'physiotherapy treatment' and 'assessment'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'get a permission' (should be 'request permission'), 'detail version' (should be 'detailed version'), and 'no-one to have knowledge' (should be 'no one who has knowledge'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Expanding your range of collocations would improve the professional tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are frequent grammatical slips. Examples include 'which considered the best' (missing 'is'), 'They will assign dummies' (the subject 'they' is unclear), 'It will conduct for 10 days' (should be 'be conducted'), and 'by learning it will help me' (grammatically redundant). Despite these errors, your control of basic grammar is sufficient to convey your message without confusion. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice.

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