Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter regarding in order to learn about supervisor training course. In the last Monday I watched an advertisement on instagram about supervisor course. I believe this course will be more useful for my job, because I am planing to apply for supervisor position. If I get this course, it would be beneficial for my career development. Moreover, I already have two years work experience as a security Gurd. I think it is more than enough to apply for supervisor job. In addition, I want to request you please give me a chance to obtain supervisor position. I will never disappoint to my Genesis company. In tandem with this, Management should also provide me proper schedule for this training course as well as following requirements.

I would appreciate to you, if company provide me supervisor course.

I look forward to your prompt response.

Yours faithfully

Harsimran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: describing the course, explaining how the company can help, and stating the benefits. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the description of the course is vague, as you do not specify the content or duration. The request for company support is also slightly unclear, as you mention a 'proper schedule' but do not explain if you need time off or financial assistance. To improve, provide more specific details about the training provider and the exact nature of the support required to make your request more persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the purpose of the letter to the request and the benefits. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'In addition', and 'In tandem with this'. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'In tandem with this'. Paragraphing is also insufficient; the entire body of the letter is presented as one block, which makes it harder to read. Using clear paragraph breaks for each main point would significantly improve the structure and flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'career development' and 'prompt response'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and minor errors, such as 'get this course' (should be 'take' or 'attend'), 'security Gurd' (spelling error: 'Guard'), and 'Genesis company' (which seems like a misunderstanding of the prompt). There is also a lack of precision in describing the training. To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural collocations and ensuring accurate spelling of professional terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'regarding in order to learn', 'In the last Monday' (should be 'Last Monday'), 'I will never disappoint to my Genesis company' (incorrect preposition and phrasing), and 'if company provide me' (missing article). While the meaning is generally understandable, these errors are persistent. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and article placement will help improve your accuracy.

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