Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I’m writing a letter to inform you that i saw an advertisement about how can we grow our business in electronic market.

There are different kind of courses available on the basis of training to increase business. I want to do that training.

I’m requesting you to help me to manage my schedule as in between i can do my training as well. Such as, give me some time after completion of my whole office work.

Apart from that, this training course will be great help to increase our electronic business because there are different kind of marketing skills, sales management things available to extend business. Moreover, from this training course, i will become able to know about different schemes or skills to support sales in different ways.

I’m looking forward to see your response in case of increase business through this trainning session.

Yours faithfully

Harpreet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: describing the course, requesting company assistance, and explaining the benefits. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the description of the course is vague, referring only to 'electronic market' and 'different kind of courses' without specific details. The request for assistance is also slightly unclear regarding the specific nature of the support needed. To improve, aim to provide more concrete examples or specific details about the training content and the exact type of support (e.g., financial sponsorship or study leave) to better satisfy the requirements of a formal business letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure, moving from the purpose of the letter to the request and finally the benefits. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Apart from that' and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, the paragraphing is underdeveloped; the entire body of the letter is essentially one block of text, which makes it harder to follow. Using clear paragraph breaks for each distinct point would significantly improve the flow. Additionally, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or repetitive, and the connection between sentences could be smoother to ensure a more professional tone.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. You rely on repetitive phrases like 'different kind of' and 'increase business'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'in case of increase business' and 'do that training', which sound unnatural. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more sophisticated business-related terminology and ensure that your word choices are accurate and contextually appropriate for a formal letter to a manager.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'I’m writing a letter to inform you that i saw' (capitalization error), 'how can we grow' (incorrect word order in a subordinate clause), and 'I’m looking forward to see' (should be 'to seeing'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and consistent capitalization will help improve your accuracy and overall clarity.

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