Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- describe the training course you want to do
- explain what the company could do to help you
- say how the course will be useful for your job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Hy sir/ Madam
Hope you are doing well. I have seen a advertisement for a training course. As now I have completed my studies and I want to go with the same job I am doing but I was working part time for this position but now I would like to switch to the full time. I was wondering if company could help me to inroll in course for team leader position training I am very interested in this position and want to start it with fully trained. As you know I am having 3 years of experience in food inspection department. I am just thinking to level up my career. Also, this course will be use for my current position just in case I was not able to get the lead position. I have seen that this course includes varity of introduction and new techniques about the food inspection job.
I will be very grateful If i got a chance to learn more about it and get a chance to inroll.
Your faithful,
Jashanpreet Kaur
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all three bullet points: describing the course, explaining the company's role, and stating the benefits. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. The description of the course is vague, and the explanation of how the company can help is not clearly defined beyond a general request for enrollment. The tone is occasionally informal for a business letter (e.g., 'Hy sir/ Madam'), and the purpose of the letter is slightly obscured by the focus on the writer's personal career history rather than the specific training opportunity. To improve, ensure each bullet point is expanded with more specific details.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter follows a basic structure, but the flow of ideas is disjointed. There is a lack of effective cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs. For instance, the transition between the writer's current job status and the request for training is abrupt. Paragraphing is absent, which makes the text appear as a single block of information. While the reader can follow the general intent, the lack of logical progression and limited use of linking words (such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition') hinders the overall coherence of the message.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'inroll' instead of 'enroll', 'varity' instead of 'variety', and 'Hy' instead of 'Dear'. The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'want to go with the same job' and 'start it with fully trained'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the presence of spelling errors limit the score. Expanding the range of professional vocabulary would significantly improve the quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with verb tenses ('I was working', 'I am having'), article usage ('a advertisement'), and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. For example, 'I am just thinking to level up my career' is grammatically awkward. While the errors do not completely prevent communication, they are frequent and noticeable throughout the text. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and reducing errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage.
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