Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- describe the training course you want to do
- explain what the company could do to help you
- say how the course will be useful for your job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sir/Madam,
I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to shed some light on training course which are related to MS excel, which are beneficial on the daily project of our company.
To start with reason why I wanna do this course, As you know we are daily using excel for our data records but I wanna tell you I do not have enough knowledge about this one. I am good learner and I adopt things quickly and it is best way to develop and enhance my knowledge as well as excel skill.
Probing ahead how the company help me, the course timeline is two week after the completion they provide certificate, so I need two week leave from my work. I hope you approved my leave. Last but not least, this course would be helpful in future to solve data analysis related problems. one more thing due to this course I get valid certificate and become certified excel expert.
I hope you understand my situation and grant me leave.
Sincerely,
Jashan
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt: describing the course, explaining the company's role, and detailing the benefits. However, the development of these points is somewhat superficial. For example, the description of the course is limited to 'MS excel' without specific details about the curriculum or duration. The tone is also inconsistent; while it attempts a formal structure, phrases like 'I wanna tell you' and 'I hope you approved my leave' are too informal for a professional request to a manager. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific details about the course content and use a consistently professional tone.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter has a clear overall structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'Probing ahead how the company help me'. Paragraphing is present, but the transition between ideas could be smoother. Some sentences are disjointed, and the logical flow is occasionally interrupted by grammatical errors, which makes the progression of ideas feel slightly forced. Using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition to') would help improve the flow and logical connection between your points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. You rely on basic phrasing, such as 'shed some light on' (which is used incorrectly here) and 'I am good learner'. There are also some issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'daily project of our company' instead of 'daily operations'. While the meaning is clear, the range is limited, and there is little evidence of less common lexical items or idiomatic professional language. Expanding your vocabulary to include more business-appropriate terminology would significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'training course which are related' (subject-verb agreement), 'we are daily using' (awkward adverb placement), and 'I hope you approved my leave' (incorrect tense usage). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tenses will help improve your accuracy.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.