Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to tell you about my interest in learning to do CPR. I have seen the advertisement about that training which could be very beneficial for me being a nanny. The organization provide practical training for CPR. The way it is performed, an assistance it can provide to save a life in some seconds. Moreover, the tools which are used and many more things so that being a nanny I could save a life in any emergency. This course would be useful for my job. As i would be able to help older people, if they are having any problem in breathing or if they faint. This could also assit me to save heart patients for some time so that they could be taken to hospital for further medical assitance.

I am looking forward to hearing an answer from you regarding my training for CPR.

Yours Faithfully

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: describing the course, explaining how the company can help, and detailing the benefits. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. While you mention the course is for CPR, you do not specify the duration, cost, or scheduling, which would be expected in a formal request to a manager. Furthermore, you mention the company could help, but you fail to explicitly state what you need (e.g., time off or financial support). To reach a higher band, ensure your ideas are fully extended with specific details that make the request actionable for the reader.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to the course description and finally the benefits. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the entire body of the letter is contained in one block, which makes it harder to follow. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'As', the flow is occasionally mechanical. The transition between the description of the course and the request for company assistance is abrupt. Using clear paragraph breaks for each bullet point would significantly improve the structure and readability of your response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your needs clearly. You use some relevant topic-specific terms like 'emergency', 'nanny', and 'medical assistance'. However, there are instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'an assistance it can provide' and 'many more things'. These errors do not impede communication, but they limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on using more natural collocations and avoiding vague phrases like 'many more things' in favor of more specific descriptions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the advertisement', 'an assistance') and subject-verb agreement ('The organization provide'). Additionally, some sentences are fragmented or lack clarity, such as 'The way it is performed, an assistance it can provide to save a life in some seconds.' While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency of the text. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for small errors will help improve your score.

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