Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope everything is fine at your end.

I'm writing to express my core interest towards project management course for three months. Recently, I have seen an advertisement on television regarding that course and its benefits.

Being a valuable asset, I would like company to support me so that I can enroll myself in this course. The training course consist of four sessions that will take place on every Monday for three months. So I would really appreciate if management can approve me to do work from home on every Monday.

Let me draw your attention to explain you how this course will add value to my current job profile. My position with the organization is senior analyst and this course will help me to enhance my skills and learn about managing any given project. Additional, I can acquire more knowledge about leadership. Growing professionally with this company as a manager is a dream.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Regards,

Priyanka

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You described the project management course, explained the need for remote work on Mondays, and linked the training to your professional development as a senior analyst. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat brief. For instance, while you mention the course will help you manage projects, providing a specific example of a current project challenge that this training would solve would have made your argument more persuasive and fully developed, moving the response toward a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter follows a logical structure with clear paragraphing. Each paragraph focuses on one of the required points, which helps the reader follow your argument easily. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Recently', 'So', and 'Additionally' to link ideas. However, the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother. The phrase 'Let me draw your attention to explain you' is slightly awkward and wordy. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing is more precise would help achieve a higher score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'valuable asset', 'current job profile', and 'acquire more knowledge'. There are some minor issues with collocation and word choice, such as 'express my core interest towards' (which should be 'in') and 'approve me to do work' (which should be 'approve my request to work'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over professional vocabulary. Expanding your range to include more sophisticated collocations related to business and professional development would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical slips, such as 'The training course consist' (should be 'consists'), 'on every Monday' (should be 'every Monday'), and 'Additional, I can acquire' (should be 'Additionally'). These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of adverbs. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will help you reach the next band level.

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