Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir or Madam,

i am writing to inform you that i saw an advertisement related to a training program. I believe that it would be beneficial for my job.

With regard to , This training course associates with advance SQL real time problems and solutions. I would like to inform you that currently we are facing several data base issues that can be resolved by SQL.

It is also worth mentioning that this program not only teaches SQL basic but also improves problem solving skills.

I am referencing to an online link about this course.

I feel it is essential to inform you so that you understand full context of my request.

To get enroll in this program i need your permission.

I would appreciate it if you give me your written approval. It would be great if you sent a mail with approval letter within a week.

I look forward to hearing from you at your earliest convenience.

Your faithfully

Abhi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the course is described, the company's role is identified, and the relevance to the job is explained. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat thin. For instance, the description of the course is vague, and the explanation of how the company can help is limited to a request for permission and a letter. To achieve a higher band, you should provide more specific details about the course content and elaborate on how the company's support (e.g., funding or time off) would specifically facilitate your professional development. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of your request. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'With regard to' and 'It is also worth mentioning'. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'I am referencing to an online link'. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly. Overall, the structure is coherent and serves the purpose of the task well.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'beneficial', 'context', and 'at your earliest convenience'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'associates with advance SQL' (should be 'focuses on advanced SQL') and 'To get enroll' (should be 'To enroll'). Additionally, 'Your faithfully' is a common error; it should be 'Yours faithfully'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and standard business letter conventions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Examples include capitalization issues ('i' instead of 'I'), missing articles ('the' before 'SQL'), and incorrect verb forms ('To get enroll'). While these errors rarely impede the reader's understanding, they occur consistently throughout the text. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, consistent capitalization, and the correct use of articles. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures while ensuring they remain error-free would also help raise your score in this criterion.

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