Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- describe the training course you want to do
- explain what the company could do to help you
- say how the course will be useful for your job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sir,
I am writing to inform you that yesterday, I saw an advertisement which was related to a digital marketing course, and I feel this course is crucial for me if I know the basics of advanced marketing strategies.
Firstly, this course was related to digital media, which helps individuals to learn about digital technology. However, this course provides a clear path for businessmen to set up a business and become successful to achieve desire goals.
Additionally, this course is not expensive within $100 they trained individuals from the beginner level to the advanced level. However, I would be very thankful if you could give me 2 weeks off so that I can enrol in this course and learn something new that helps us to enhance this business.
Furthermore, due to an increase in competition, it is increasingly challenging to achieve the goals that we set up every week because nowadays, everyone uses digital media to promote their business. However, we were not advertising any product because our staff do not have enough knowledge regarding digital marketing. That is the reason I am thinking it will be an excellent option to learn about this.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: describing the course, explaining how the company can help, and stating the benefits. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the description of the course is vague, and the explanation of how the company can help is restricted to a request for time off. To achieve a higher band, you should provide more specific details about the course content and explain how the company could support you beyond just time off, such as financial assistance or equipment. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the structure could be more persuasive.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Additionally', and 'Furthermore'. However, the use of 'However' is often misused; for example, in the second paragraph, 'However' does not contrast with the previous sentence, making the flow feel mechanical or illogical. Additionally, some sentences are repetitive, such as the repeated mention of 'this course'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used to show logical relationships rather than just acting as sentence starters would improve your score.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, but it is somewhat repetitive. Phrases like 'this course' and 'digital media' are used frequently. There are also some minor collocation issues, such as 'achieve desire goals' (should be 'desired goals') and 'within $100 they trained individuals' (should be 'for $100, they train individuals'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise business-related terminology and avoid repeating the same nouns and verbs throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'if I know the basics' should be 'as I want to learn the basics'. The tense usage is inconsistent, switching between past and present when describing the course. There are also errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'we were not advertising any product' (should be 'we are not currently advertising'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency.
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