Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- describe the training course you want to do
- explain what the company could do to help you
- say how the course will be useful for your job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Madam,
I hope you find this email well. Thank you for approving my two weeks break.
I am writing this letter for a help and important for the company upcoming projects. Last Friday I saw an advertisement regarding artificial intelligence. It's three weeks online course and I am very interested to learn about it and as you know how AI is playing crucial part in our software and technology.
Moreover, I called to them for more information about this course and I surprised after to knowing that if I give them our company credit card for fees I can get up to 60% discount. So, if company provides me card information that will be helpful for me.
Once, I will done with course, It will give so many benefits like saving time, make our projects graphics more clear and easy to understand for clients and also I can teach few tips and tricks to my colleagues which will create smooth and better project delivery. If you think this can help you please send me card front and back photos on this email. Thank you for your time.
Sincerely,
Aryan Patel
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: describing the course, explaining how the company can help, and detailing the benefits. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, the explanation of how the company can help is a bit blunt, and the request for 'card front and back photos' is unprofessional and potentially risky in a real-world business context. To reach a higher band, ensure your suggestions are framed with more professional etiquette and provide slightly more depth regarding the specific skills you hope to gain from the AI training.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Once', which assist in linking ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing, such as 'I am writing this letter for a help'. The transition between the course description and the request for financial assistance is a bit abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall logical progression of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, using terms like 'advertisement', 'artificial intelligence', and 'crucial part'. However, there are several instances of unnatural word choice and minor errors, such as 'I hope you find this email well' (should be 'I hope this email finds you well') and 'I surprised after to knowing'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. Expanding your range to include more professional collocations would help elevate your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'I am writing this letter for a help', 'if company provides me card', and 'Once, I will done with course'. These errors involve articles, verb tenses, and sentence construction. While these mistakes do not prevent the reader from understanding your request, they occur frequently enough to keep the score in the 5.5 to 6.0 range. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage will significantly improve your accuracy.
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