Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir

Me Kuljeet Singh, one of your company's employee. I am working in your company from last 5 years, where I got greater opportunities experience of my life. However, I saw an advertisement regarding for health and wellness training course.

Moreover, from last couple of months I am facing back pain because of over seating time in front of computer. That back pain do not let me sleep at night also I could not give my best to my job due to this problem. So, I just want to know that if there are any chance for me to get this course, so that I can work on my fitness and help to decrease my stress level bit.

On the other hand, it will help me to do my job in active way with proper concentration on my daily tasks.

I will be thankful if you would provide me this opportunity.

Thank you

Yours faithful

Kuljeet Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: describing the course, explaining how the company can help, and stating the benefits. However, the development is somewhat limited. The description of the course is vague, as it only mentions 'health and wellness' without specific details. Furthermore, the request for company assistance is not clearly articulated; you mention wanting to know if there is a 'chance' for the course, but you do not explicitly ask for funding, time off, or other specific support. To improve, ensure each point is fully extended with concrete details to demonstrate a clear purpose to the manager.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear opening and closing. You use some basic cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'However', and 'On the other hand' to link ideas. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the entire body of the letter is presented as a single block, which makes it difficult to follow the transition between different points. Using separate paragraphs for each bullet point would significantly improve the structure and readability of your writing. Additionally, some transitions feel slightly mechanical.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'advertisement', 'concentration', and 'opportunity'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'over seating time' instead of 'prolonged sitting' and 'greater opportunities experience' which is grammatically unclear. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on simple descriptors. Expanding your range to include more precise collocations related to professional development would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede flow. Examples include 'Me Kuljeet Singh' (should be 'I am Kuljeet Singh'), 'one of your company's employee' (should be 'employees'), and 'from last 5 years' (should be 'for the last 5 years'). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'I just want to know that if there are any chance'. Improving your control over basic subject-verb agreement and preposition usage is essential for higher accuracy.

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