Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- describe the training course you want to do
- explain what the company could do to help you
- say how the course will be useful for your job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my interest towards a software quality assurance training course, which I have seen in an advertisement.
The software quality assurance program is a most effective, teaching how to use advanced technology to eradicate rigorous tasks in the system and enhance the quality of software; however, the automatic problem deductive feature entice me a lot to improve outcomes promptly. The worth of this course cannot be neglected; therefore, I am really eager to enroll in it.
I would be grateful of the organization if they could give me a chance to carry out the wonderful course while working with them, which is solely possible either they could book a seat for me or refer me to another branch where this training is the foundation to embark on further work.
I believe this course would be excessively useful for my profession because it provides the profound knowledge about how to use modern software appropriately, which would improve the way of working in a fast-paced environment without any hurdle. This would not only increase the productive but also effects the productivity of employees.
I sincerely hope you will consider my request. I would greatly appreciate your support and would be happy to discuss this matter at your convenience.
Yours sincerely,
Harjit Lehar
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You describe the course, explain how the company can assist, and detail the benefits to your role. However, the development of ideas is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'eradicate rigorous tasks' and 'automatic problem deductive feature,' which makes the specific nature of the course slightly unclear. While the purpose is clear and the tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a manager, more precise language would help the reader better understand the specific value of the training.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a formal closing. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate the different requirements of the task. You use cohesive devices such as 'however,' 'therefore,' and 'not only... but also' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or forced, and the flow between sentences is occasionally disrupted by non-standard phrasing, such as in the second paragraph. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear, and the letter is easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some sophisticated terms like 'profound,' 'convenience,' and 'embark.' However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice or awkward collocations that impede natural expression. For example, 'eradicate rigorous tasks' is not standard English, and 'increase the productive' is grammatically incorrect (should be 'productivity'). The phrase 'automatic problem deductive feature' is also unclear. To reach a higher band, focus on using collocations that are natural in a professional business context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex constructions, there are frequent errors in grammar and word form that occasionally distract the reader. For instance, 'I would be grateful of the organization' should be 'grateful to the organization,' and 'either they could book' is missing a corresponding 'or' structure. Additionally, 'effects the productivity' should be 'affects.' While these errors do not prevent the message from being understood, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. More attention to subject-verb agreement and preposition usage is recommended.
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