Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to bring your attention to a new training course that I came across recently through an advertisement. The course is about an advanced communication skills that could benefit me in my day-to-day responsibilities.

To enroll in this course I require some help from your side. Firstly, if you could give me an extra day off to attend the classes. Secondly, it would be great if your company could pay for the registration fee. This would enable me to give more attention to learning such a valuable skill.

This course will not only benefit me in all projects but is also beneficial for our company to generate more links with other companies. Moreover, this course will assist me to build confidence to elaborate effectively on difficult projects during an international meeting.

I would really appreciate it if you can help me to enroll in this course.

I am looking forward to your prompt response on this course.

Yours sincerely,

Parminder Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly describe the training course as an 'advanced communication skills' program, explain the support needed (time off and funding), and articulate the benefits for both your personal development and the company's international networking. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter. To reach a higher band, you could provide slightly more specific detail about the course content or the duration of the training to further develop your ideas, as the current explanation is somewhat general.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing each requirement, and a professional closing. You use cohesive devices such as 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' and 'Moreover' to guide the reader through your arguments. The paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter. To improve, ensure that the transition between the request for support and the benefits of the course is smoother. Currently, the flow is functional but could benefit from more varied linking phrases to connect the ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'responsibilities,' 'registration fee,' and 'elaborate effectively.' However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'an advanced communication skills' (should be 'advanced communication skills' without 'an') and 'generate more links' (a more natural collocation would be 'build professional relationships' or 'expand our network'). Expanding your repertoire of business-related collocations would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are some grammatical slips, such as 'an advanced communication skills' (article error) and 'assist me to build' (the verb 'assist' is more naturally followed by 'in building' or 'to help me build'). Punctuation is generally accurate, and the sentence structures are sufficient to convey your request clearly. To improve, focus on ensuring consistent subject-verb agreement and refining the use of articles with uncountable nouns.

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