Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- describe the training course you want to do
- explain what the company could do to help you
- say how the course will be useful for your job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear sir,
I hope you are in radiant health and I am writing this letter to you for tarining couuse which I want to do for our company's benefit.
Actually, this couse is about and sale and markiting, In this couse, college provides the important aspects of sale such as how to intract with coustomer and the way of sales person to relate item usage for daily basis of coustomer. Which shold be followed by every salesman in order to achieve their sale target.
If our company can pay my couse fee, I will repay it in installments, along with this I want to change my work schedule according to my classes. So I can attend every class without any break.
After, finishing this course I can work in efficient way to reach the maximum sale of our products. As well as, I can also train new employes to work with for us to enhance the economy of our workstation.
Your faithfully
Mark cattle
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points: the course is described, the company's assistance is requested, and the benefits are explained. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the description of the course is vague, focusing on general sales concepts rather than specific details of the training. The request for financial and scheduling support is clear, but the explanation of how the course will benefit the company could be more professional and detailed. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though it lacks the polish expected for a business communication.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'After, finishing this course' is grammatically awkward and disrupts the flow. Additionally, the use of 'As well as' at the start of a sentence is not ideal in a formal context. While the overall structure is coherent, the connections between sentences could be smoother and more varied to improve the professional quality of the writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but contains several spelling errors, such as 'tarining', 'couuse', 'markiting', 'intract', 'coustomer', and 'employes'. These errors are frequent and detract from the professional tone of the letter. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic terms like 'important aspects' and 'efficient way'. To achieve a higher band, you should focus on accurate spelling and incorporating more precise, professional terminology related to business and training, such as 'professional development', 'sales techniques', or 'operational efficiency'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect article usage ('the way of sales person'), subject-verb agreement, and punctuation errors, such as the comma splice in 'Actually, this couse is about and sale and markiting, In this couse...'. The sentence structure is often repetitive, and the phrasing is sometimes unnatural. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation limits the score. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and correct sentence boundaries would be beneficial.
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