Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to express my interest in attending a training course which will be useful for my job as seen in the advertisement.

First, i would like .to attend an artificial intelligence training course. The course is phenomenal and i am excited to learn how to use artificial intelligence to create video animation, brand flyers, images and many more.

I would be glad if the company permit me to take a leave for a week to attend the training. This training is very important and beneficial to me. The training will be held on September 7th to 13th at Oceanic hotel Lagos.

However, the course will be useful for my current job because i will be able to use artificial intelligence to work efficiently for scheduling and strategizing methods to be used to attract clients and development of the company.

I look forward to your response and hope for a positive consideration of my request.

Yours faithfully,

Ogundipe Karimot

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly describe the AI training course, explain the request for leave, and outline the professional benefits. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For example, while you mention the course will help with 'scheduling and strategizing', providing a more specific example of a current work challenge that this course would solve would have made your argument more persuasive and fully developed, moving the response into a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a formal closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the task. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'First' and 'However' to transition between ideas. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the flow between sentences is smoother. For instance, the transition in the third paragraph could be improved by connecting the request for leave more directly to the importance of the training dates provided.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You use a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly, such as 'phenomenal', 'beneficial', and 'strategizing'. However, the vocabulary is somewhat repetitive and lacks the sophistication required for higher bands. There are also minor issues with word choice, such as 'permit me to take a leave', which should be 'grant me leave' or 'approve my leave request'. Expanding your range to include more precise business collocations would enhance your score significantly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate control over simple sentence structures, and your meaning is always clear. However, there are several persistent errors, such as the failure to capitalize the personal pronoun 'i' throughout the text and a punctuation error in the second paragraph ('.to'). The range of complex structures is limited; most sentences follow a simple subject-verb-object pattern. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence forms, such as conditional clauses (e.g., 'If I were to attend this course, I would be able to...'), and ensure consistent attention to basic mechanics like capitalization.

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