Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope you are doing well.

I am reaching out to you regarding the advertisement for a training course.

I work for an international company, which rely on the Information Technology(IT) software tools. I want to excel in this IT field with-in the 6 month period of time. Once, I am certified in this course, the company will promote me to abroad for on-site work. I have a basic knowledge of coding experience from my college. But, which is not qualified for the abroad program that my company is looking for. Now, with this course I will be eligible to apply for that role and could get a chance to go to abroad. In other words, this course will help me keep my job and take me to higher positions in near future. I will be looking forward to hearing back from you. Thank you for initiating this course.

Best regards,

Mallareddy Koppela

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: describing the course, explaining how the company can help, and stating the benefits. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, you mention the company could help, but you do not specify how (e.g., financial support or time off). Furthermore, the description of the course itself is vague; you refer to it as an 'IT field' course but do not name it or provide specific details. To reach a higher band, ensure that each bullet point is expanded with specific, relevant details that provide a clearer picture to the reader.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the purpose of the email to the benefits and the request for support. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the entire body of the letter is contained within a single block of text. Using separate paragraphs for each bullet point would significantly improve the structure and readability. Additionally, some cohesive devices are used, such as 'In other words,' but the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. Improving the use of transition words and paragraph breaks will help the ideas connect more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'I want to excel' and 'get a chance.' There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'promote me to abroad' (which should be 'promote me to an overseas position') and 'initiating this course' (which is likely not the intended meaning, as you are asking for support, not suggesting the company start the course). Expanding your range to include more professional, business-appropriate terminology would improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are several grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For instance, 'which rely on' should be 'which relies on' (subject-verb agreement), and 'with-in the 6 month period of time' is wordy and contains a hyphenation error. You also have issues with articles and prepositions, such as 'go to abroad' (should be 'go abroad'). While you attempt some complex sentences, they often contain errors. Focusing on basic sentence accuracy and correcting common errors like subject-verb agreement and article usage will help you achieve a higher band.

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