Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to inform you about the part-time course, which I want to attend.

I have been working in this company for the last five years as a manager. Recently, I come across one course which I want to do is advanced IT program in our town. This course will teach me about the various IT systems, how it works and how we can keep our records quickly and many more things. As a result, it will improve my work efficiency and provide my in-depth knowledge about IT.

I will appreciate it if you could allow me to work from Monday to Friday, from 8 AM to 3 PM and weekends off. It will offer me extra time to attend my afternoon lecture sessions regularly and I got more time for exam preperation. Also, for few days, I hope you reduce my responsibilities and makes me free for my part-time course.

Advanced IT system course will facilitate me to keep updated our office database within a short time and various apps through I can contact to our clients daily without phone calls. Also, I will share this valuable knowledge with my colleagues. Overtime, we can get the information regarding how to develop new websites and display our best performance in the business market. As a result, it will improve our professional image helpful to generate highest revenue.

I hope you consider my request and allow me to complete a part-time course. I look forward to your prompt response in this matter.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours sincerely,

Twinkle

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response successfully covers all the bullet points outlined in the prompt. First, the writer describes the training course clearly as an 'advanced IT program' in their town that teaches various IT systems and record-keeping. Second, the company's help is explained through requests for adjusted working hours from 8 AM to 3 PM and reduced responsibilities. Finally, the usefulness of the course is well-articulated in terms of improving work efficiency, keeping office database records updated, and communicating with clients without phone calls. All parts of the task are addressed with relevant and extended ideas, fully satisfying the requirements for a Band 7.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter maintains a clear logical organization and progression throughout. The response is divided into logical paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose such as introducing the course, requesting company support, and detailing professional benefits. Cohesive devices like 'As a result', 'Also', and 'Overtime' are used to connect ideas, though some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive in their positioning. Paragraphing is used appropriately, and referencing between sentences is generally clear, leading to a solid Band 6.5 performance.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with attempts at less common lexical items such as 'work efficiency', 'professional image', and 'valuable knowledge'. However, there are notable word choice and collocation inaccuracies throughout the text. For example, the writer says 'Recently, I come across one course' (instead of came across), 'provide my in-depth knowledge' (instead of provide me with), and 'various apps through I can contact to our clients' (preposition and article errors). These lexical slips prevent the response from reaching a higher band, placing it comfortably at Band 6.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The writer demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and conditional structures. However, grammatical errors are frequent throughout the response. Examples include tense inconsistency ('Recently, I come across'), article misuse ('the advanced IT system course', 'generate highest revenue'), and awkward phrasing ('makes me free for my part-time course'). While these errors do not impede overall communication, they disrupt the flow of sentences and indicate that control over complex structures is still developing. This aligns well with the Band 6.0 descriptors.

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