Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to let you know that I am requesting to get financial support to pursue a online Professional course to develop my skills.

This program is titled "AI service for Data Mining" hosted by Microsoft Company. it is a four-week online training program covering the knowledge of database, using AI platform and theory to write a code. This curriculum includes live interactive workshops and focus on learning various coding sessions. At the end, on completion of course there will be a intensive multi choice exam to earn the course. I want to let you know I am looking if you can confirm and cover my enrollment fees of $1000.

This course is directly relevant to my current role as a AI Engineer. Learning this specialized technique course will eventually upgrade my skills but it will also help me to have more ideas and knowledge as we are in race of publishing a AI platform.

Thank you for considering my request. I look forward to discussing this opportunity with you further.

Your faithfully,

Kishan Bhavsar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The candidate has successfully addressed all three bullet points of the task instructions. First, the training course is clearly described as an online professional program titled "AI service for Data Mining" hosted by Microsoft Company, covering databases, AI platforms, and coding over four weeks. Second, the student explains what the company could do by asking to "confirm and cover my enrollment fees of $1000." Third, the relevance to the job is explained by linking it to the current role as an AI Engineer and mentioning the ongoing project of publishing an AI platform. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager, and the ideas are fully extended and supported, warranting a solid Band 7.0 for this criterion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter exhibits a clear overall progression and logical organization. The response is divided into logical paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose: the introduction states the purpose of the letter, the second paragraph details the course and financial request, the third outlines job relevance, and the final paragraph provides a polite sign-off. Cohesive devices such as "This program," "At the end," and "This course" are used to connect ideas effectively, although the sign-off contains a slight slip ("Your faithfully" instead of "Yours faithfully"). Overall, the paragraphing and flow meet the requirements for a Band 7.0 level.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is generally adequate and appropriate for the workplace context, featuring less common terms such as "financial support," "interactive workshops," and "directly relevant." However, there are some noticeable lexical inaccuracies and awkward collocations. For instance, the student writes "pursue a online Professional course" (article error and unnecessary capitalization), "earn the course" (instead of complete or pass the course), and "intensive multi choice exam" (instead of multiple-choice exam). While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the score from reaching a higher band, placing the response comfortably within the Band 6.0 range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as "Learning this specialized technique course will eventually upgrade my skills but it will also help me..." There are, however, several grammatical errors throughout the text. These include missing or incorrect articles ("pursue a online course"), punctuation issues around quotation marks, preposition choices ("on completion of course" instead of "of the course"), and a spelling/typographical error in the closing formula ("Your faithfully"). Despite these recurring minor errors, the meaning is always clear and communication is not impeded, which is characteristic of Band 6.0 performance.

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