Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope your are doing great . As you know I am a prfound programmer in your company and want to excel more in my skills , so recently I have seen an advertisement of a advance coding training course which includes some advance coding, few upgraded programming techniques which will going to help in my personal as well as in company's growth for sure.

The training course is for 2 months with adjustable timings, so my work won't be affected by this . I really want to join this and it would be appreciated if you could do little change my shift from Afternoon to in Morning for 2 months months so that I can learn some new and benefited the same to the company .

Hoping to heard a positive response from your side.

Yours Sincerely,

Jiya.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student covers all bullet points required by the task: describing the course, explaining how the company could help (changing shift timings), and stating how it will be useful for their job (company and personal growth). However, the length requirement is NOT met, as the response contains only 141 words, falling short of the 150-word minimum. Furthermore, the opening greeting uses 'Dear Sir,' whereas the prompt explicitly instructs to begin with 'Dear Sir or Madam,'. While the ideas are relevant, they remain slightly underdeveloped due to the constrained word count. Therefore, a band score of 5.0 is appropriate.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks appropriate paragraphing, grouping most of the content into a single dense block of text, with only a small second paragraph before the sign-off. Cohesive devices are basic and repetitive, such as 'so' and 'and', which are used frequently to string clauses together (e.g., '...and want to excel more in my skills , so recently I have seen...'). Although the overall progression of the letter is understandable, the lack of clear paragraph structure and mechanical referencing limit the score. This performance aligns with the Band 5 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'prfound' (misspelled), 'excel', and 'upgraded programming techniques'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, including 'prfound' instead of 'profound', 'advance' instead of 'advanced', and 'benefited the same' which is awkward collocation. The range is limited but minimally adequate to convey the basic message, causing occasional difficulty for the reader. This corresponds to a Band 5.0 lexical resource score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are numerous punctuation and grammatical errors, such as 'I hope your are doing great' (incorrect pronoun 'your'), missing articles ('in Morning', 'for 2 months months'), and run-on sentences joined improperly by comma splices or conjunctions ('...so my work won't be affected by this . I really want to join this and it would be appreciated...'). Frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar score solidly at Band 5.0.

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