Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope this letter finds you well.

I have been working as a customer care representative in this company for two years. Yesterday, I saw an advertisement for a training course on company's portal, which I believe will be useful for my job. The course is related to customers' service. It will facilitate me to enhance my communication skills and dealing with a variety of customers; in addition, it will be beneficial for my career growth.

I want the company to help me acquire this course by referring me in HR department. Since, only limited slots are availabe for this I want you to send an email as soon as possible. After the training, I will be able to guide the other members of the team and company will get the benefit too.

I believe this training course will be proficient for my work in many ways. Firstly, it will assist me with my dealing skills. Secondly, I will learn the different behaviors of individuals. Overall, it palys a crucial role for my growth as a customer care representative.

Thank you in advance.

Yours sincerely,

Zara Shiakh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task, meeting the basic requirements for each bullet point, although some ideas are more fully developed than others. The training course is described as being related to customers' service, and how it will be useful is explained by mentioning how it will enhance communication skills and dealing with a variety of customers. The requirement for company help is also mentioned through requesting a referral to the HR department. However, some areas remain slightly under-developed; for instance, the explanation of how the company will benefit is somewhat superficial when stating 'company will get the benefit too.' To reach a higher level, all bullet points would need to be extended with more specific details and fully elaborated arguments throughout the entire letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter maintains a coherent overall arrangement with a clear, logical progression from introduction to the main points and conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different topics, such as the description of the course in the first paragraph, the request for company assistance in the second paragraph, and the overall benefits in the third paragraph. However, cohesion at times feels a bit mechanical or repetitive, particularly with transitions like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' in the final paragraph. Additionally, referencing is occasionally imprecise, such as in the phrase 'acquire this course by referring me in HR department,' which impacts smooth flow. To improve, the writer should use a wider variety of cohesive devices more naturally and flexibly to link ideas seamlessly across sentences and paragraphs.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully conveying the intended message. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'customer care representative,' 'communication skills,' and 'career growth.' However, there are some noticeable inaccuracies in word choice, collocation, and word form. For example, phrases like 'acquire this course' and 'referring me in HR department' are unnatural collocations, and the spelling error 'availabe' alongside the typo 'palys' occurs in the text. Although these lexical errors do not impede communication, they reflect a limited precision in vocabulary control. To achieve a higher standard, the student needs to incorporate a wider range of sophisticated, less common lexical items with accurate collocation and flawless spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing structures like relative clauses ('which I believe will be useful') and conditional elements effectively. There are some errors in grammar and punctuation, such as missing articles ('in company's portal', 'in HR department') and awkward preposition usage ('referring me in'). Despite these issues, the grammatical errors are sporadic rather than frequent, and they rarely impede communication. The writer maintains good control over basic sentence patterns. To move to the next level, the student should aim to produce a higher proportion of error-free complex sentences and demonstrate greater mastery over articles and prepositional patterns within complex grammatical structures.

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