Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope you are in good health and spirits. I am writing this letter to show my interest in upcoming training course, which would take place in next week. I saw the advertisement on important notice board that the course will assist us about problem solving as well as communications skills. Moreover, this course will also give us a chance to participate in diffrent competition and winner will get a money as prize. I want to show my ability by joining.

Can you give me a permission letter to join the classes. These skills really help me to improve my productivity and sharpen my skills more. I hope you will help me to indluge in this activities.

Exicted to hear from you, i .will wait for your response

Yours Faithfully,

Raman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the course as training in problem-solving and communication, and you ask your manager for permission to attend. However, the task is addressed only partially: the course description is brief, the request for company support is limited to a permission letter, and the benefit to your job is stated generally as improving productivity and skills rather than explained with a work-related example. The mention of competitions and a prize does not clarify how the course supports your role. The response also falls 15 words short of the required minimum, which leaves little room to develop the three points. Add details about the course format or schedule, specify practical support such as covering fees or adjusting work hours, and explain how you will apply the learning at work.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter follows a recognisable order: you introduce the course, make a request, and mention a possible benefit. Basic linking words such as “Moreover” and “as well as” help connect some information. However, the progression is not fully clear because the competition and prize detail interrupts the explanation of why you want the course, and the request and job benefit are compressed into a short paragraph. The closing sentence, “Exicted to hear from you,” is also not clearly connected to the request. Use separate paragraphs for the course, the support you need, and its workplace value, and use clear transitions to show how each point relates to your purpose.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “training course,” “problem solving,” “communication skills,” and “productivity.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “assist us about problem solving,” “give us a permission letter,” and “indulge in this activities.” Spelling errors including “diffrent,” “indluge,” and “Exicted” also make the letter less polished. Aim for precise workplace expressions, for example, “develop problem-solving skills,” “approve my attendance,” and “apply these skills to my role.” Proofreading spelling and choosing natural collocations would make your meaning easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including the relative clause in “course, which would take place in next week” and the sentence beginning “I saw the advertisement.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors occur in articles, sentence construction, agreement, and punctuation. For example, “in next week” needs a different time expression, while “winner will get a money” has problems with the article and countability. The final line, “i .will wait for your response,” also contains incorrect capitalisation and punctuation. Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and verb, correct articles, and complete punctuation; shorter, accurate sentences would help before you attempt more complex structures.

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