Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Respected Sir,

I am writing this letter to make you aware that I have huge inerest in learning proper posture while working at workplace.

I would appreciate you if you add my name in the list of workers who are going to participate in this training, which is going to held in our company next month. The additional thing is that on the day of training I am already schduled the the morning shift. As per my knowledge training timing is in morning as well; therefore in order to ignore further inconvenience can you please schedle other worker instead of me.

I am interested in this one day in-person training due to the fact that I am new employee, so, it is obevious that I am less experienced as compared to others. Resultantly, there are a number of chances of using awakward posture either while picking boxes or grabinng some heavy items, therefore, attending this training would be edifying for me.

Waiting for your response!

Your's sincerely,

Manpreet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The letter is related to workplace posture training and explains why it could help you, particularly when “picking boxes” or handling heavy items. However, it does not fulfil the task as set: the prompt asks you to describe an advertised course and explain what the company could do to help you, whereas you refer to training already being organised at your company and ask to be moved off the morning shift. This changes the central request and leaves the company’s support unclear. The course description is also limited to being a one-day, in-person session. To address the task more fully, identify the advertised course and make a direct, consistent request for support, such as funding, time off, or help with registration.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a recognisable sequence: you introduce your interest, discuss the scheduling issue, and then explain the training’s relevance to your work. Connectors such as “therefore” and “due to the fact that” help show relationships between ideas. However, the progression is weakened by the shift from asking to be added to the training list to asking for another worker to be scheduled instead. The reader may not understand whether you want to attend or avoid the session. Some linking is also mechanical, especially the long sentence beginning “As per my knowledge.” Organise the letter around a clear request, then give the course details and job-related reasons in separate, focused paragraphs.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “proper posture,” “in-person training,” “picking boxes,” and “heavy items,” which makes your workplace context clear. There are also attempts at more formal expressions, such as “I would appreciate” and “Resultantly.” However, several spelling errors and unnatural word choices reduce precision, including “inerest,” “schduled,” “schedle,” “awakward,” and “grabinng.” “Edifying” is also an awkward choice for describing practical workplace training. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and proofread carefully; phrases such as “improve my posture” and “handling heavy items” would communicate your meaning more clearly and appropriately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including a reason clause with “due to the fact that” and a result clause introduced by “therefore.” The main ideas are generally understandable, but errors in sentence construction and punctuation sometimes make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “I would appreciate you if you add my name” has an incorrect verb pattern, and “which is going to held” is missing a required verb form. The sentence beginning “I am interested in this one day…” also joins several ideas with unclear punctuation. Practise conditional request forms such as “I would appreciate it if you could…” and check verb forms and sentence boundaries when editing.

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