Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir ,

Hopefully you are doing well.I am writting this letter to inform you that I want to do one course which is benefical for my knowledge and for our company as well .The name of the course is advancement in sales and marketing its available on the campus ,The institute near by our company also providing classes of it .One of my friend told me that all the faculties are from international countries and they are teaching sales and marketing internationally .The only problem is that class of that course starts and 4:00 pm and our office hours is till 5:00pm if you could do adjustment of my one hour in the work it would be appreciated or I can starts work one hour early in the morning time ,So in this way I can easily complete my whole work and go for my class too .Hopefully ,You could understand my whole scenario .I am waiting to hearing your response soon .

Your's Sincerly ,

Raman.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main purpose by naming a sales and marketing course, asking for a change to your working hours, and explaining that the training could benefit both your knowledge and the company. However, the usefulness to your specific job is only stated generally; explain, for example, how the course would help you improve sales results or communicate with clients. The request for support is also not fully clear: you offer two possible arrangements, but do not specify whether you are asking the manager to approve one or both. The opening and closing are present, but the salutation does not follow the requested wording. Overall, the relevant points are included, but they remain limited and under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter follows a broadly understandable order: you introduce the course, describe its location and instructors, explain the scheduling difficulty, and request an adjustment. This gives the reader a basic sense of your purpose. However, nearly all the information is placed in one long paragraph, so the different points are not clearly separated. Several ideas are joined with commas or repeated connectors such as “So” and “Hopefully,” which makes the progression feel crowded rather than controlled. The reference to “the class” and “that course” is generally understandable, but the request and its alternatives could be signposted more clearly. Use separate paragraphs for the course, the support requested, and its work-related value, with clearer linking between them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “sales and marketing,” “faculties,” “international,” and “adjustment,” and the reader can understand the general message. There are also attempts to use more specific expressions, such as “internationally” and “complete my whole work.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, including “do one course,” “the institute … providing classes of it,” and “do adjustment of my one hour.” Spelling errors such as “writting,” “benefical,” and “Sincerly” are noticeable and reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Aim for natural workplace phrases and check spelling; for example, say “attend a course” and “adjust my working hours.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect several ideas in longer sentences, including the explanation of the class schedule and the possible change to your workday. However, these complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the letter difficult to follow. For example, “The only problem is that class of that course starts and 4:00 pm” has an incorrect preposition and article, while “our office hours is till 5:00pm” has a subject–verb agreement error. The sentence beginning “if you could do adjustment” also lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “I can starts work” uses the wrong verb form. Use shorter, complete sentences and check articles, agreement, verb forms, and punctuation.

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