Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• describe the training course you want to do
• explain what the company could do to help you
• say how the course will be useful for your job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

Good day boss, i have seen an advertisement training about our job, and i just want you to know that i want to endroll this i want to take this opportunity because this very usefull to our work as a industrial electrical company we learn here more techniques about the big voltages specially in the tranformers devices and its new for me because they teach on how to put the wires under the soil ,instead of hangging it into the tower and also they teach more about advance safety training for all for free as a freebess of the course and after we finish study the training company will give to all graduates a safety equipements to use for the work, so this is very important to us to take this opportunity , i hope your kind and consideration boss. thank you and god bless you.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify a relevant course and give useful details about transformer technology, underground wiring, safety training, and equipment provided to graduates. These points show how the training relates to your electrical work. However, the request to your manager is not fully developed: you do not clearly specify what help you want from the company, such as paying the fee, allowing time off, or covering travel. The course description is also difficult to follow in places, and the benefit to your own job is mostly implied rather than explained. The informal phrases “Good day boss” and “thank you and god bless you” are not well suited to a letter to a manager. State your request directly and explain how the new skills would improve your work.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response contains relevant information, but it is presented as one long, heavily connected sentence, so the reader has to work to distinguish the course details, the company’s possible support, and the benefits to your job. Linking words such as “and,” “because,” and “so” are repeated, and the sequence of ideas is not always clear. For example, the discussion moves from course content to free safety training and then to equipment without clear transitions. Organise the letter into short paragraphs, with one focused on the course, one on the support you are requesting, and one on its workplace value. Use a small range of accurate connectors and punctuation to make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant work-related vocabulary, including “transformers,” “safety training,” and “safety equipment,” which helps communicate the general subject of the course. However, the range is limited, and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts of the message harder to understand, such as “endroll,” “tranformers,” “hangging,” and “freebess.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, including “advertisement training” and “big voltages.” Choose standard course-related phrases and check spelling carefully. More precise wording for the course content and the support you need would make the letter clearer and more professional, while retaining the relevant technical vocabulary you already use.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The letter attempts to connect ideas using clauses such as “because this very usefull to our work” and “after we finish study the training,” but these structures are often faulty. Errors with sentence boundaries, verb forms, articles, and agreement occur throughout; for example, “i have seen an advertisement training” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “this very usefull” is missing a verb. The long run-on sentence also makes relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Use shorter, complete sentences and practise patterns such as “I would like to enrol in…” and “After I complete the course, I will be able to…”. Correct punctuation and capitalisation will also help the reader understand your meaning.

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