Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Undoubtedly, every country have there own style of colthes and there own way to wear them, therefore some individuals assert that it's easy to understand peron's culture and character from their clothes. This essay will explain why I am stronglly disagree with this.
One of the main reason is person's culture and charcter show how they behave with other rather than which kind of clothes they wear. If individual get proper upbringing from their parents about they culture nad treditiona and how to do their hole rituals, this things dipict the culute and character of person. Therefore, proper upbring matter alot rather then clothes.
Furthermore, while some people wear very cultural clothes but they are not doing there social responsibilities well such as helping others, feed poor individuals and so on, some people who have good heart always assist other like assist older once to close the road, feed poors. This kind of citizen have effective culutre and charcter. As a result, colthes will not help anyone to show there character and culture.
Moreover, education help individuals to become good character citizen. People with proper education and knowledge aware about their roles and duties. Whereas some people are unaware about it due to lack of education. Consequently, eduaction matter more than clothes.
In conclusion, treditional clothes hold a very important support in any religion and culture, but to depict the perosn's culture and character education, parenting and kind heartedness matter a lot more then the type of clothes they wear.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The essay addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive. While you argue that upbringing and education are more important than clothing, the points could be more distinct. For instance, the arguments regarding 'social responsibilities' and 'education' overlap significantly. To reach a higher band, ensure each paragraph introduces a unique, well-supported dimension of the argument rather than restating the same core idea in different ways. The response is balanced, but the depth of analysis is limited by the repetitive nature of the supporting points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear central topic. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion' to link ideas. However, the flow within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'this things dipict'). The transition between sentences could be smoother to improve the overall progression of the argument. While the structure is coherent, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and lacks the flexibility required for higher bands.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision needed for a higher score. There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'colthes', 'peron's', 'treditiona', 'dipict', 'eduaction') which, while not always impeding communication, are noticeable. You rely on simple, repetitive vocabulary such as 'good', 'important', and 'clothes'. To improve, you should aim to use more sophisticated synonyms and collocations. For example, instead of 'good character citizen', consider 'upstanding member of society'. The current level of vocabulary is sufficient for basic communication but lacks the flexibility and accuracy expected at higher levels.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'every country have', 'proper upbring matter'), missing articles, and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'stronglly disagree'). These errors are persistent and occur in almost every sentence. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these slips prevents the text from demonstrating the control required for a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and pluralization would significantly improve your score.
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