Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In todays era, where social media plays a important role in our life it is possible to think about peoples culture on their attire bases. I am agree with this statement.

Firstly, i it all start from our childhood when are in teenage the children's judge each other on their bases of things they carry. if in class one student is carrying a big expensive watch in school other students will think that he will be surely come from Punjabi Sikh family, because in India they owned a lot oif land in Punjab. for instance, when I was in school, we are group of fix friends. one of our friend is very poor. he is not able bring his food from home. so he judged by people that he is from lower caste.

secondly, I am agree this this statement because in world also everybody got judged from what clothes they are wearing, what shoes are they wearing. on social if someone is showing expensive clothes and shoes on their pages, people start liking so much. he will get millions followers. Like stars, for example, in our Punjab there is Punjabi artist diljit dosing he wear expensive clothes and shoes. people think he is rich, and they comment on hid page that he must be from Punjabi Sikh baat family.

personally, I don't believe that much ion people s attire I like to wear simple also if have enough money. but i am agree with statement

In conculsion, I am agree with this that people judge other on the bases on of clothes like in ins some colours refers to some castes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position, but the development of ideas is limited. While you provide examples, such as the mention of school peers and a Punjabi artist, the explanation of how these relate to 'culture' and 'character' is underdeveloped. The argument relies heavily on personal anecdotes rather than a broader analysis of the topic. To improve, ensure that each paragraph clearly links the chosen example back to the core question of whether clothing accurately reflects a person's inner character or cultural identity. The conclusion is brief and repeats the introduction rather than synthesizing the main points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'I am agree this this statement' and 'In conculsion'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between school experiences and social media stars feels abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track the logical flow of your argument. Using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') would help improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'big', 'expensive', and 'rich'. There are also several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'attire bases' instead of 'basis of their attire' and 'Punjabi Sikh baat family'. Spelling errors are frequent (e.g., 'todays', 'oif', 'conculsion', 'ins'), which occasionally distracts the reader. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'socio-economic status', 'cultural identity', or 'superficial judgment', and focus on accurate spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('he will be surely come', 'he wear expensive clothes'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures ('I am agree with this statement'). While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing 'to be' verbs.

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