Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The argument from some people that you can identify one's culture and personality from their appearence in certain clothes. Though, I understand what the viewpoint means but I disagree with the claim from some of my personal experiences in life which don't hold against and will be discussed further in the essay.

The main reason, I contradict with the given statement is beacuse, I had some friends in my college who wear modern clothes in the public but came out more religious and orthodox in real life when more time spent over the years knowing closely. To illustrate, the friend which I spent most time was cool in spending time in club, gym and outgoing with other mates in college but was looking for the wife who practice their traditions, calm and reserved in personality which was opposite to what I expected from the time we spent together.

Sometime the argument bite the outcome with the trueness in some guesses but that doesn't hold true when assessed on larger focus group thereby the claim from some people to correctly identify the stature of the person from clothing does not stand its ground. Also, this should not be practised as it narrows the mindset to socialize with the people having pre biasis which makes bonding difficult. Instead, people should assimilate with others spending time with an open mind to know them closely and learn from the experiences rather than from the look.

In conclusion, people should treat each other with humanity at first then with religion, culture and character which fades the depth of connection with judicial pre-judgement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you disagree that clothing reliably reveals culture or personality, and you support this with a relevant personal example about a college friend whose modern public appearance did not match his traditional expectations in private life. You also explain the broader risk of judging people before getting to know them, so the response addresses the question and gives reasons. The personal example is the strongest development, but the point about guesses sometimes being accurate is introduced briefly and not explained or illustrated. To strengthen the response further, clarify how clothing can sometimes reflect culture while still being an unreliable guide to an individual’s character, and extend each supporting point with a specific explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction states your disagreement, the body paragraphs give a personal example and a broader argument, and the conclusion restates your view. Linking expressions such as “To illustrate,” “Also,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. However, some connections are awkward or unclear, particularly “Sometime the argument bite the outcome with the trueness in some guesses,” which makes the relationship between the point and your position difficult to follow. The first paragraph also combines several ideas in a long sentence. Use clearer topic sentences and make each paragraph’s central point explicit; then connect examples to claims with straightforward references rather than relying mainly on signposting phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “orthodox,” “traditions,” “assimilate,” and “pre-judgement,” and you can express ideas about social interaction and personal identity. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the meaning hard to understand. For example, “the argument bite the outcome,” “larger focus group,” and “the stature of the person” do not convey your intended points clearly. There are also spelling errors such as “appearence,” “beacuse,” and “biasis.” Aim for precise, natural combinations and check spelling carefully. For instance, use “a broader group,” “judge someone’s character,” and “preconceived ideas” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a concession in “Though, I understand what the viewpoint means but I disagree” and a relative clause in “the friend which I spent most time.” These attempts show some range, but errors in sentence construction and grammatical patterns are frequent enough to make parts of the argument difficult to follow. The opening is a sentence fragment, while “the friend which I spent most time” needs a clearer relative construction, such as “the friend I spent the most time with.” In “the wife who practice their traditions,” the verb does not agree with its subject. Review clause formation, subject–verb agreement, and punctuation, and divide long or incomplete sentences into clearer units.

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