Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the modern era , there are so many cultures and character we can judge people by their choice of clothes which i completely agree with my knowledge and experience to share the relevant examples to some extent to this topic.

To Begin with , i would say everyone has different cultures and wearing sense accroding to their grown up environment and day to day life changing fasions and interest .lets talk about the examples from my work place as i have different workmates from different countries and cultures which widly can be recognised by everone .. i have collegues from asia europe middle east and china ,they always wear according to their taste and trend and i can easily guess their way of talking thinking and conveing messages across our company ..Some middle east circle wear their hijabs and burkas during work where we can tell about the persons character what they intensions would be ,Despite all this it it very essential and vital to know someones thoughts and way to express work place environment where we all can fit with different different mentalities at workplace or outside ..

It is always said that we dont fit into such atmosphere where we see so many outsiders who do not fit to work as according to their wearing sense .. i would say this is the best practice to gain such confidence and show you integrity towrds work rather than focusing on impressing someones with your shiny glamers attire .This is lifetime experience to work with such a great people to learn about thier cultures and clothes variety to explore the trend and comfort of cloth.

In Conclusion , i would greatly agree to this context that persons culture and choice of clothes plays crucial part to recognise that persons ability of character .This can give the other person to know the better judgment at anyplace how he or she will behave and further actions and talks . This can lead to gain life big examples and experiences to see the big shape of our surroundings .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You state a clear general position in the introduction (“I completely agree”) and return to it in the conclusion. The workplace example also gives the response a relevant personal basis. However, the task asks whether clothes reveal culture and character, and these two ideas are not consistently distinguished or explained. For instance, the discussion of hijabs and burkas relates to cultural or religious identity, but the claim that clothing reveals “what their intentions would be” is unsupported and risks stereotyping. The point about fitting into a workplace is also difficult to connect to the question. Develop one or two relevant reasons, explain how clothing may signal cultural practices or personal values, and qualify what cannot reliably be inferred from appearance.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so there is some basic organisation, and phrases such as “To Begin with” and “In Conclusion” signal stages of the essay. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from cultural differences to colleagues’ communication, then to religious clothing and workplace fit without showing how each point supports the main claim. Linking expressions such as “Despite all this” do not clearly express the relationship between ideas, and repeated references to “different” and “workplace” make the development feel repetitive. Use a clearer topic sentence for each paragraph, keep each paragraph focused on one reason, and connect examples explicitly to the claim they illustrate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “cultures,” “environment,” “integrity,” and “attire,” and you try to express ideas about identity and workplace expectations. However, the usable range is limited by frequent spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural combinations, such as “wearing sense,” “day to day life changing fasions,” and “gain life big examples.” These choices sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Several words are also used where a more precise term is needed: “character” and “ability of character” do not clearly convey the qualities you mean. Build a bank of accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; choose specific terms such as “personal values,” “religious dress,” or “professional appearance” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, but complex sentences are often difficult to follow because of faulty structure and punctuation. For example, the opening sentence combines several ideas without a clear grammatical relationship, while “i have different workmates … which widly can be recognised” has an unclear relative clause. There are also recurring problems with sentence boundaries, capitalisation, agreement and articles, as in “persons culture and choice of clothes plays” and “a great people.” These errors sometimes obscure meaning, even though the overall argument can usually be understood. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses; check subject–verb agreement, articles, and full stops before submitting.

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