Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter

• describe the problem with the equipment
• explain how this problem is affecting your work
• say what you want the shop or company to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

Hello my name is zainab hansoti. I am cooking instructor. I Order Air Fryer for making some food when it come to my home after that I checked that Air Fryer it is not working. It doesn't get warm. I tried so many times but it doesn't working at all. As I am a cooking instructor so I have to cook food in it and explain my student that at how to bake a cake in it and how we have to set the temperature in it.

I want the to tell to the company that replace my air fryer otherwise send a technician so they can see what type of fault is there in the air fryer and I want a express service because i don't want to damage my children future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main points: you report that the air fryer does not heat, explain that you need it to demonstrate cooking to your students, and request a replacement or a technician. These details make the letter relevant, but the effects on your work and the requested action are only briefly explained. For example, clarify whether lessons have been delayed or demonstrations cannot take place, and state which solution you prefer and by when. The response contains 137 words, so it is 13 words below the required minimum; this limits the opportunity to develop the points fully. Add a suitable closing and a little more detail about the disruption and the service you expect.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The information follows a generally understandable order: you introduce yourself and the equipment, describe the fault, explain its effect on your teaching, and make a request. This gives the letter a coherent overall arrangement. However, nearly all the content is placed in one paragraph, and the links between ideas are sometimes abrupt. The opening moves directly from your name to ordering the fryer, while the final sentence combines a replacement, a technician visit, express service, and concern about your children’s future. Use separate paragraphs for the problem, its impact, and your request, and connect the points more clearly with phrases such as “As a result” and “Therefore.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough task-related vocabulary to communicate the basic situation, including “Air Fryer,” “cooking instructor,” “temperature,” and “technician.” However, the range is limited, and several word choices or combinations are unclear or unnatural, which can make the reader pause. For instance, “it doesn't get warm” could be expressed more precisely as “it does not heat up,” and “express service” is less natural than “urgent service” or “a prompt repair.” The phrase “damage my children future” is also unclear in this context; explain directly how the fault affects your students’ learning. Aim for precise service-related vocabulary and check spelling and capitalization, such as “I” and “air fryer.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Your message is understandable, and you attempt to combine ideas using clauses such as “As I am a cooking instructor” and “so they can see.” However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. Examples include “I am cooking instructor” (missing article), “when it come to my home” (verb form), and “I want the to tell to the company” (incorrect sentence structure). The long sentence beginning “As I am a cooking instructor” also contains an unclear construction: “explain my student that at how.” Practise accurate articles, subject–verb agreement, and sentence patterns such as “I would like you to replace the fryer or arrange for a technician to inspect it.”

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