Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter

• describe the problem with the equipment
• explain how this problem is affecting your work
• say what you want the shop or company to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you about a problem with a piece of equipment that I use for my job.

First of all, I am using your compony laptop to attend not only meetings, but also seminars. Whenever, I am attending meeting laptop screen is always blink as well as not working well.

Moreover, due to, the blinking screen, I am not able to focus on my work. Thus, I am distract from the meeting. I am not able to change my screen as well as new website owing to the damage screen.

Furthermore, could you please provide me new laptop. So, I can focus on my work and improve my productivity. Owing to, the good productivity, I will achieve my goals as well as get success in my work.

I hope this suggestions are helpful. If you have more question regarding my laptop information.

Your Faithfull,

Riddhi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: describing the problem, explaining the impact on work, and requesting a solution. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. The description of the problem is repetitive, and the request for a new laptop is quite abrupt. While the purpose of the letter is clear, the tone is inconsistent, and the ideas could be expanded with more specific details regarding the purchase date or warranty status to make the request more persuasive and professional.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Whenever, I am attending meeting' is grammatically awkward and disrupts the flow. The transition 'Furthermore' is used to introduce the request, but the connection between the paragraphs feels somewhat disjointed. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the overall progression of ideas lacks the sophistication required for a higher band score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'compony' instead of 'company' and 'Faithfull' instead of 'Faithfully'. The phrase 'get success' is unnatural in this context. While the student manages to convey the message, the range of vocabulary is limited, and the errors in spelling and collocation occasionally draw attention to the language rather than the content.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are issues with article usage ('the blinking screen'), subject-verb agreement ('laptop screen is always blink'), and sentence structure ('If you have more question regarding my laptop information' is an incomplete sentence). The student relies on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as the misuse of 'owing to' and 'due to'.

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