Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter

• describe the problem with the equipment
• explain how this problem is affecting your work
• say what you want the shop or company to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to inform you that there is a technical problem with my office computer.

While working on the office project, the computer screen goes blank and stops working. I give several tries Restarting the window, but nothing happened.

Next week, I have a very important project coming up for my work, which require to work on this computer, and all my data history is stored on it. Without this data, I could not finish my project, and I have been working on this project from last six months. I do not have enough time to start everything again.

I know you are very busy during this time. Can please repair my office PC in the next one or two days. So that I will have sufficient time to complete the office project and prepare for the presentation.

I look forward to considering my urgent request.

Good Regards,

Savi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You described the technical problem (screen going blank), explained the impact on your work (inability to finish a project due to data inaccessibility), and clearly stated your desired outcome (repair within one or two days). The tone is appropriate for a formal letter, and the purpose is clear throughout. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are slightly more developed; for example, you could briefly mention the specific nature of the project or the type of computer to add more detail to your request.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into distinct paragraphs, each serving a clear purpose. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'While', 'Next week', and 'So that' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of transition words. For instance, the transition between the problem description and the impact on your work is a bit abrupt. Additionally, ensure that your paragraphing is consistent; the current structure is functional, but more sophisticated linking would elevate the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using terms like 'technical problem', 'sufficient time', and 'urgent request'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'data history' (which is slightly unnatural) and 'I give several tries' (which should be 'I tried several times'). To improve, try to incorporate more precise collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing. Your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but it lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher band scores.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'which require to work' (should be 'which requires me to work'), 'I have been working on this project from last six months' (should be 'for the last six months'), and 'Can please repair' (missing the subject 'you'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall accuracy. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions and modal verbs in requests.

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