Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter

• describe the problem with the equipment
• explain how this problem is affecting your work
• say what you want the shop or company to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Madam ,

I am writing this letter to tell you about a camera which i bought from your company .

I am working from home because of this i need many electronic part to support my work . A camera is playing significant roll in my daily work . I am using this camera to attend my web meeting with my clints , manager , my HR. Right now i am facing a blur problem with this . No body can see my face because of this .

It is affecting my work . For instance , i am not able to join the crucial meeting from my office . Thus , my manager is yelling on me .

I am requesting to either please replace my equipment with other or you can give me the another one as soon as possible .

I am look forward from you on this matter as soon as possible .

Your faithfully ,

Harry dean .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: describing the problem (blurriness), explaining the impact (missing meetings, manager's reaction), and stating the desired outcome (replacement). The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although the development of ideas is somewhat simplistic. The purpose of the letter is clear from the outset, and the reader is left in no doubt about the nature of the complaint. To reach a higher band, the student should aim to provide more detailed explanations and use a more professional tone, particularly when describing the interaction with the manager.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the narrative. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. For example, the phrase 'because of this' is used twice in close proximity, which disrupts the flow. The transition between the problem description and the impact on work is clear, but the overall structure could benefit from more varied linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'therefore') to improve the logical progression between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'blur problem' (should be 'focusing issue' or 'blurry image'), 'electronic part' (should be 'equipment' or 'devices'), and 'significant roll' (should be 'significant role'). While the meaning is generally clear, the student relies on basic vocabulary and makes spelling errors like 'clints' (clients) and 'Your faithfully' (Yours faithfully). Expanding the range of vocabulary would help convey ideas more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include missing articles ('a camera', 'the company'), incorrect verb forms ('I am look forward'), and punctuation errors (spaces before commas). While the meaning is rarely obscured, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage would significantly improve the accuracy of the writing.

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