Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter

• describe the problem with the equipment
• explain how this problem is affecting your work
• say what you want the shop or company to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope this letter finds you well.

I am writing this letter to let you know that, I recently bought a computer from your company Acsis and the mouse which is attached with computer is not working properly and that needs to be replaced as soon as possible.

As i am working work from home job and my work is completely depends on the computer as a Data Analyst I have to complete all the data work for my company due to mouse issues I have so many enteries pending and thta is really affecting my work as well as that is gonna be a too much work load for me until it is repaired.

I am requesting you, to repair it as soon as possible so i can make all of my data enteries and send it to my manager because he is waiting for the task which can be done after mouse will be repair.

Yours Sincerely,

Om

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully covers all parts of the prompt, addressing all three required bullet points. The problem with the equipment is identified, as the writer explains that the computer mouse attached to the recently purchased Acsis computer is malfunctioning and needs replacement. The impact on work is also explained by noting the writer's remote role as a Data Analyst, leading to pending entries and an unmanageable workload. Finally, the desired action is clearly stated, with a request for prompt repair or replacement so data can be submitted to the manager. However, some ideas show a slight imbalance in development. While the problem and desired outcome are clearly stated, the explanation of how it affects work relies heavily on repetitive phrasing rather than deeply extended reasoning. This sits comfortably at the targeted level, meeting core requirements while leaving room for greater depth and fully supported idea extension typical of higher bands.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter maintains a generally coherent overall arrangement and follows a recognizable formal letter format, beginning with a standard greeting and ending with a sign-off. Information is presented in a sequential manner, moving from the purchase details to the problem, its impact, and the requested action. However, the cohesion between ideas is sometimes mechanical or faulty due to run-on sentence structures and a lack of proper punctuation. For instance, the second main paragraph is essentially a single very long sentence linked by coordinating conjunctions and commas, which weakens the logical flow and referencing. Paragraphing is also somewhat disrupted, as the body of the letter is compressed into dense blocks. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to break complex ideas into shorter, distinct sentences and employ a wider, more natural range of cohesive devices to guide the reader smoothly through the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate to communicate the basic message of the letter, but the range is limited and contains noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word form. Examples include spelling errors such as 'enteries' instead of 'entries' and 'thta' instead of 'that', as well as awkward phrasing like 'working work from home job' and 'data work'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary related to professional life, such as 'Data Analyst' and 'work load', but inaccuracies in collocation and spelling prevent the response from achieving a higher score. While these lexical errors do not completely impede communication, they highlight a need for greater precision, a wider variety of descriptive terms, and careful proofreading to eliminate basic spelling mistakes and ensure appropriate word choices for a formal business context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The writing demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting to link multiple clauses together. However, control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are run-on sentences caused by comma splices and missing periods, such as in the second paragraph where multiple independent thoughts are joined incorrectly with commas. Other errors include tense and verb form inconsistencies, such as 'which can be done after mouse will be repair' instead of 'after the mouse is repaired', and missing articles like 'attached with computer' instead of 'attached to the computer'. Despite these errors in grammar and punctuation, the meaning remains mostly clear and communication is rarely impeded. To progress further, the writer must improve punctuation habits, ensure correct subject-verb agreement, and exercise better control over complex clause structures.

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