Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter

• describe the problem with the equipment
• explain how this problem is affecting your work
• say what you want the shop or company to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I purpose of writing this letter to you address the issue that I am confronting while using the laptop, purchased from your prior two months.

Actually , Yesterday I was preparing the assighment for my upcoming thesis study,which was really crucial for my final exams but, It suddenly started blinking numerous time, I tried multiple attempts by myself by restarting it. Unfortunately, I was unable to fix it.

My thesis assignment will happen at begining of the next month, which making me more anxoius and worried Since, It will not only affect my performance but, my reputation is also on the sake as, I am one of the brilliant student of my class, do not want to feel lowly.

I only request you to please repair it on the priority basis or If it will take time replace it with the another one.That will be really appreciated.

I am looking forward a positive response from your side.

Your's sincerely,

Navdeep Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three required points: you identify the laptop’s blinking problem, explain that it threatens your thesis work and performance, and request repair or replacement. The purpose is clear from the opening, and the urgency is relevant. However, some details are less fully developed: “started blinking” does not specify whether the screen, power light, or another part is affected, and the effect on your work could be explained more directly—for example, whether you cannot use particular software or complete tasks. The concern about your reputation and being a “brilliant student” is less useful than practical information about the disruption. A more precise description and a clear timeframe for the company’s response would strengthen the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter follows a sensible overall sequence: you state the purpose, describe the fault, explain its consequences, and make a request. This makes the main message easy to follow, and the closing is appropriate in intent. The ideas are also linked through time and cause, such as the laptop failing while you prepared the assignment and the approaching thesis deadline. To make the progression more polished, separate the problem, its impact, and your requested action into clearer paragraphs. Some links are awkward or overused, particularly the repeated “but” and “Since” in the impact sentence. Use simpler transitions and ensure each sentence develops one main point; this would make the organisation feel more controlled and less effortful.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “repair,” “replace,” “upcoming thesis,” and “performance,” so the reader can understand the issue and its importance. However, several inaccurate word choices, collocations, and spelling errors reduce precision: “address the issue that I am confronting,” “assignment will happen,” “on the priority basis,” and “on the sake” do not express the intended meanings naturally. There are also misspellings such as “assighment,” “begining,” and “anxoius.” Aim for straightforward, accurate phrases such as “the problem I am experiencing,” “my thesis is due,” and “as a priority.” More reliable spelling and natural collocations would make your vocabulary more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a sentence explaining the consequences of the fault, and the overall meaning remains understandable. However, errors in sentence formation and punctuation are frequent enough to make some parts awkward. For example, “I purpose of writing this letter to you address” lacks a correct verb structure; “which making me more anxious” needs a finite verb; and “I am looking forward a positive response” is missing the required preposition. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, especially around “Yesterday,” “Since,” and the commas in the long impact sentence. Practise complete clauses, accurate verb forms, and sentence boundaries. For instance: “I am writing to report a problem with the laptop I bought from you two months ago.”

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