Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this 21st century, nowadays majority of people like to travel in extreme different climate conditions like Sahara desert or Antarctic. This easy intends to explore the main advantages and disadvantages in the forthcoming paragraphs with relevant examples: however i think demerits will definitely supersede merits.

If we look at pros they are evident, the first and the foremost reasons is every day humans are leading with very hectic schedule, so they are looking for noise free environment. Moreover, they also wants to experience untouched beauty of the nature. In other words, the places like Sahara desert and Antarctic are so clam that helps people to recover themselves while explore different things. A survey conducted at "Oxford University" reveals that 65% people are exploring untough areas on the earth to get discovered new areas. Hence, when tourist start visiting these areas people build houses, hotel and other places with helps to increase employment.

Let us assess the other aspect now, while explore these remote areas can be dangerous because of climate and wildlife and there are no facilities with which humans are use too. In simple words, in case of any emergence there would be not hospitals, food markets, transportation and with very less rest stations. However, while exploring these areas we are the disturbing the environment which is leading to drastic climate change. For instance sudden volcanic eruptions, heavy snowfall, floods, and suddenly increase in temperature.

In conclusion, in the wake of above, it can be easily and logically included that although exploring new areas help to increase tourism and tourists come across environment awareness but it more it leads to deforestation or disturbing the environments when people try to build some place to increase the tourism.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both benefits and disadvantages and make your overall view clear: you argue that the disadvantages outweigh the benefits. Relevant benefits include experiencing natural beauty and creating employment, while risks include harsh conditions, limited services and environmental disturbance. These points keep the response focused on the question. However, some ideas are less fully explained than others. For example, the claim that remote tourism increases employment is not supported with a specific explanation of the jobs created, and the environmental examples of eruptions, snowfall and floods are not clearly linked to tourists’ actions. Develop each point with a clear cause-and-effect explanation and a relevant example to make your discussion more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on benefits, a paragraph on disadvantages and a conclusion. Signposting such as “If we look at pros” and “Let us assess the other aspect now” helps readers follow the shift between sides. However, some linking is mechanical or unclear, and the conclusion introduces deforestation without establishing it clearly in the body. Within paragraphs, ideas sometimes run together; for instance, the sentence about quiet surroundings, recovery and exploring different things combines several points without showing their relationship precisely. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each supporting detail directly to its main point. Check pronoun references and transitions so the progression feels smoother and less formulaic.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “hectic schedule,” “untouched beauty,” “remote areas,” “wildlife” and “employment.” These choices show an effort to discuss both tourism and environmental concerns. However, inaccurate word choice, spelling and collocation are noticeable and sometimes make meaning less clear: “extreme different climate conditions,” “noise free environment,” “clam,” “untough areas” and “emergence” do not express the intended meanings naturally. There is also repetition of general terms such as “areas” and “exploring.” Build precision by learning common collocations for travel in harsh environments and checking spelling and word forms. More accurate vocabulary would make your ideas easier to understand and sound more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “because” and “although,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction occur across the response. Examples include “majority of people like,” “they also wants,” “the first and the foremost reasons is,” and “there are no facilities with which humans are use too.” Some sentences are also awkwardly joined, as in “although exploring new areas help to increase tourism … but it more it leads.” These errors sometimes make the reader pause to interpret your meaning. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and clause structure, then proofread each sentence for a complete, grammatically consistent construction.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.