Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this modern era, many people visting locations such as the Sahara desert and Antarctic where the conditions are bad. There some merits and demrits to go these places such as they get chance to explore new things and spend time with thier friends and family. However, you may face the problem of food and health issues. I will explain my viewpoints in upcoming paragraphs.

On the one hand, when people vistings the places like Sahara desert and Antarctic, they will get the opportunity to explore new things, they will search about their culture, language and they can enjoy by doing different things such as camel riding and camping. Apart from this, they can understand desert wildlife, climate as well as geography. For example vistors will learn how the animals survive in extreme weather with limited water and food they will realize the imoprtance of nature and abour wildlife.

On the other hand, the extreme hot can cause the dehydration, then people will get sick. For example, visitors feels week and dizzy beacuse of heat and water there is also food shortage. Furhtermore, people may get lost beacuse it is very hard to get the direction when weather is too cold due to snow poeple can not even see proplery so it is not possible for them to get the right diraction.In addition, these place are very expensive to visit. Visitors have topay for hotels, food traveles and so on.

To conclude, although there are some benefits to travels on such places like Shara desert and ANtarctic but thier disadvantages can not be ignored. When people can enjoy, and explore things, then poeple can gace the health problems.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both sides of the question and give a clear overall view: visiting remote environments offers opportunities to learn and explore, but also brings health, safety and cost risks. Relevant examples include camel riding, camping, wildlife, dehydration and getting lost. However, the benefits are more fully explained than some disadvantages: food shortage and expense are mentioned but not developed, and the discussion could distinguish more clearly between the Sahara and Antarctic, whose hazards differ. The conclusion restates the contrast, though it could give a more precise final judgement. To strengthen the response, explain how each example affects tourists and support the less-developed points with specific details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for benefits and disadvantages, and a conclusion. The signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” make the main progression easy to follow. Within paragraphs, however, ideas sometimes run together: the benefits paragraph moves from culture and language to activities and wildlife without clearly showing how these points connect. Some linking is mechanical, and the long sentence beginning “For example visitors will learn” needs clearer punctuation and separation of ideas. Use topic sentences and organise each paragraph around one or two connected points; clearer referencing would also help readers follow who is affected.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “dehydration,” “extreme weather,” “wildlife,” “food shortage” and “geography.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “limited water and food.” However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural word choices are noticeable, for example “visting,” “demrits,” “week,” “gace” and “the extreme hot.” Some phrases are also awkward, including “search about their culture” and “enjoy by doing different things.” These errors sometimes make the reader pause, although the intended meaning is generally recoverable. Check spelling carefully and learn natural collocations for describing travel, hazards and learning experiences.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the response is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors nevertheless make parts difficult to read. For example, “There some merits and demrits to go these places” is missing a verb and uses an incomplete construction; “visitors feels” has subject–verb disagreement; and “people can not even see properly so it is not possible…” joins clauses without adequate punctuation. Articles, plurals and verb forms also need attention, as in “these place” and “people vistings.” Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use full stops or conjunctions to control longer sentences. This will make your ideas easier to follow.

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