Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

A growing number of people in today's time exploring locations where weather conditions are sever like the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. This trend gain huge popularity due to social media influence and desire of people to discover something new and exciting for thrilling experience, whereas it will be harmful for naturally conserved locations.

On the positive side, visiting extreme weather condition's places bring a tremendous benefits to the tourists. Firstly, if they exploring Antarctic, they know about marine creature, discover eye-catching view of nature and photography locations. Consequently, they learn about how to live in sever cold weather without basic facilities like food, shelter, public transports and accommodation, and encourage them to inculcate important capabilities like independence, critical thinking and problem solving skills for their survival. Moreover, they can share stunning view of natural places on their social media platforms and get huge likes, followers and comments on their photography skill.

On the negative side, this kind of trips causes health problems for the tourists, because it would be arduous for them to adjust with extreme hot or cold weather, which result into death or fatal condition in certain situations. Moreover, overpopulation at the Antarctic ocean areas create noise, air and water pollution and disturb the seabed life. For instance, dumping litter in the sea dramatically responsible for the damage to reproductive and digestive system of ocean animals due to eating plastic waste, which result into extinction of certain rare species. However, this sort of travelling are very expensive and need lot of planning and arrangements as compare to other trips.

In conclusion, travelling to sever environment condition places play a key role for exploring breath-taking view of nature, get adventurous feelings and education opportunities for scientists and researchers. However, human activities significantly damage the peaceful natural environment, marine life and posses life-threating conditions for the travelers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying benefits (personal growth, photography, education) and disadvantages (health risks, environmental damage). The position is clear throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While the environmental impact is well-supported with the example of plastic waste, the benefits section relies on a list of points that could be more deeply explored. The conclusion introduces new information regarding scientists and researchers, which was not mentioned in the body paragraphs, making the argument slightly disjointed. Overall, the response covers all requirements but would benefit from more balanced and cohesive development of the points raised.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Consequently', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion' are used to guide the reader. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly repetitive. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'this kind of trips', which lacks proper grammatical agreement. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the benefits and disadvantages. To reach a higher band, the student should aim for more sophisticated transitions that link ideas more fluidly rather than relying on standard list-like connectors.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the student to express ideas clearly. There are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'naturally conserved locations', 'marine creature', and 'extinction'. However, there are frequent errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'sever cold weather' (severe), 'tremendous benefits' (a tremendous benefit), and 'posses life-threating' (pose life-threatening). Some phrasing is slightly unnatural, such as 'inculcate important capabilities'. While the range is sufficient to convey meaning, the recurring errors in word choice and spelling prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement and pluralization, such as 'this trend gain' (gains), 'this kind of trips' (these kinds of trips), and 'travelling are' (is). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are missing articles and incorrect preposition usage, such as 'adjust with' (adjust to). While the meaning is rarely obscured, the frequency of these errors indicates a lack of control over complex structures, keeping the score in the 6.0 range.

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