Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Majority of people are nowadays very adventurous as well as thrill lover however tourism at places like Sahara dessert and Antarctic have become extremely popular. There are number of pros and cons to visit such places will be discussing in below paragraphs.

Firstly, the increase in demand of digital existence of individuals on different social media platforms have become very common due to which places like Sahara dessert and Antarctic are advertised as a tourist place which can be dangerous for them. For an example, individual are coming for adventurous experience in extreme weather conditions can lead to health issues such as dizziness, dehydration and fatigue. If tourist are not prepared for the weather condition of such places it can cause serious problems for them.

Secondly, there are some advantages of visiting such places like individual who like to go for adventure and are physically as well as mentally prepared for trips to these locations can experience the most beautiful parts of nature. For an instance, if a group goes for a trip to Sahara dessert they will have experience the most amazing night sky view that they won’t able to see in cities due to pollution whereas, they will experience how people live there in such extreme weather conditions with less amount of facilities.

To conclude with, each and every tourist place in this world have benefits and drawbacks of visiting but people will always end up up having experiences as well as memories that will always be a part of their lives.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both the benefits and disadvantages of visiting extreme locations. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention health risks like 'dizziness' and 'dehydration' as disadvantages, and 'night sky views' as a benefit, these points could be expanded with more depth or specific examples. The introduction is a bit vague, and the conclusion is quite brief. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with clear reasoning and perhaps a more detailed illustrative example. The position is clear, but the overall depth of the argument remains at a basic level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'To conclude with' to signal the progression of your argument. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where referencing is slightly unclear, such as in the opening sentence where the connection between 'digital existence' and the popularity of these locations is not fully explained. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between ideas would enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'adventurous', 'extreme weather conditions', and 'dehydration'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'dessert' instead of 'desert', and some awkward phrasing like 'digital existence of individuals'. The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure you are using the correct terminology for the topics discussed. Expanding your range to include more academic or topic-specific vocabulary will also help.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'There are number of pros', 'individual are coming', and 'they won’t able to see'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not completely impede communication. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement, article usage, and the correct formation of modal verbs. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will significantly improve your score in this criterion.

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