Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.
What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, myriad number of visitors are visiting places where the weather condition is keep changing such as the Sahara desert and the Antarctic region. However, there could be some merits and demerits associated with this trend which I will elaborate in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin with, the first advantage is that, people who would like to go and see this places where the weather has been changing everyday. Due to this ,they would have a idea how environmental changes affects people day to day life who live over there. For instance, According to the world tourism, they have encountered that, In the year 2025, approximately 70% of the people who have visited these places and they gave feedback about how nasty weather condition affects the daily lifestyle of each individual.
On the other hand, the disadvantage of this trend is, it has negative effect on their physical health. Due to this , they are suffering from cough , cold , fever etc. As a result, it also affects their overall health. For example, according to the media report, they said that, In the year 2024, half of the visitors were suffering from cold and fever in the Antarctic because of the extreme cold.
To conclude, There are so many pros and cons associated with this notion. Moreover, it also gives them a idea about the living lifestyle over there due to these environmental effect, On the other hand , it creates negative effect on their health such as mild sneezing , cough , cold and fever etc.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both the benefits and disadvantages of visiting extreme environments. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. The points made regarding 'environmental changes' and 'physical health' are quite basic and lack depth. For instance, the argument about health is restricted to listing minor ailments like 'cough' and 'fever' without exploring the broader implications of extreme tourism. To improve, you should provide more detailed explanations and specific examples that demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic, rather than relying on vague references to 'media reports' or 'world tourism' statistics that appear fabricated.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. For example, the phrase 'Due to this' is used repeatedly in a way that does not always logically connect the preceding sentence to the next. Additionally, the transition between ideas is somewhat abrupt. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using a wider variety of linking words and phrases more naturally, and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'good', 'bad', 'places', and 'things'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'myriad number of visitors' (which is redundant) and 'weather condition is keep changing' (which is grammatically incorrect). To improve, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'harsh climates', 'adverse conditions', or 'physiological impact'. Expanding your range of synonyms and learning common collocations will help you express your ideas with greater clarity and sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'environmental changes affects' and 'weather condition is keep changing'. Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While you attempt some complex sentence structures, they are often marred by errors, such as 'people who have visited these places and they gave feedback'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for punctuation errors before submitting your work.
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