Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

One of the pressing issues widely discussed nowadays is that in contemporary times, several people are going on excursion to the places with adverse conditions such as Sahara Dessert and Antarctic. In this essay, the advantages will outweigh the disadvantages due to wide range of benefits like increase in employment ratio and increase in tourism prospects which can lead to growth of GDP of a nation.

To commence with, tours and trips break the monotony of life. Nowadays, in hustle and bustle of life, people plan holidays to rejuvenate themselves by unwinding stress of daily routine. It helps them to increase productivity, triggers their dopamine energies and enlighten their mood by making them more proactive and optimistic in life. Travelling is also beneficial in longer terms for a better well-being. Moreover, despite being risky affair, a person should allowed an autonomy to have at least a once in a lifetime experience along with all the precautionary measures.

Nevertheless, travelling to such high temperature spots

where -45 degree temperature which is an uphill task for normal human beings to sustain

Proliferation of such mindset can be beneficial in improving cross-culture by strengthening bonds between the nations, It allows

Certain preventive measure can be taken by imposing taxation to maintain sanitary and hygiene of such tourist attractive spot places, by making people more cautious before hampering the sanity of the place.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay introduces the topic and attempts to outline benefits and disadvantages, the arguments are underdeveloped and fragmented. The second half of the essay consists of incomplete sentences and disconnected thoughts, failing to provide a balanced discussion of the disadvantages as requested by the prompt. The position is stated in the introduction, but the lack of coherent supporting evidence and the failure to complete the task mean that the response only partially addresses the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt to use transition words like 'To commence with' and 'Nevertheless', the progression of ideas is severely disrupted by the incomplete nature of the later paragraphs. Paragraphing is present but ineffective because the content within the paragraphs is disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the lack of a concluding paragraph leaves the essay feeling unfinished. The overall arrangement is not coherent due to the fragmented sentences and lack of flow between the points raised.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are some attempts at more sophisticated language, such as 'rejuvenate', 'proactive', and 'proliferation', but these are often used in contexts that feel slightly unnatural or imprecise. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'excursion to the places' and 'tourist attractive spot places'. The vocabulary is repetitive in places, and the limited development of the essay restricts the opportunity to demonstrate a wider range of lexical items.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Examples include 'a person should allowed an autonomy' (missing auxiliary verb) and 'where -45 degree temperature which is an uphill task' (fragmented sentence structure). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly in the latter half of the text. While some sentences are clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the response from reaching a higher band.

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