Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In recent years, many tourists are traveling to different destinations where the conditions for surviving is difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. Individuals travel to such destinations to get new life experiences which they can treasure for a liftime. Although, visiting such places of whom they have less knowledge can be sometimes dangerous.

One of the main reason people travel to different locations is to get new and one in a lifetime experience. To expound, they want to observe the different cultures and the diversity of animals of such places. People enjoy the adrealine that they get when they experience new landscapes or meet people from different cultures. So they can gain knowledge and can see the world with different perspective. To cite an example, in recent studies done in America 70% of younger generation likes to travel to isolated places, according to them its gives them experience which is unmeasurable.

On the flip side, journey to such destinations with lack of knowledge can sometimes be life threatening. Individuals who enjoys traveling to places such as Sahara desert or Antractic with no or less knowledge about the wildlife or the culture can face consequences. They might take pictures of sacared places which is not accepted by the local people or can eat a fruit which appeals to be delecious, however can be very posionous to them and can cause illness or death if it is not dealt in a timely manner. For instance, the Amazon jungle is vast and when people visit there, the have been advised by the expert to not touch or eat anything that they do not have knowledge about.

In conclusion, traveling to different locations where conditions are difficult can be once in a life time opportunity which can give individuals new life experience to treasure. However, this can lead to life threatening events if they do not have ample knowledge about such places.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both the benefits and disadvantages of visiting extreme environments. The ideas are relevant, such as the desire for unique experiences and the risks of cultural insensitivity or physical danger. However, the development is somewhat limited. For instance, the example regarding the '70% of younger generation' in America lacks specific context or relevance to the Sahara or Antarctic. The position is clear, but the arguments could be more deeply explored to reach a higher band. The response covers all parts of the prompt, but the supporting details are occasionally generic or slightly disconnected from the specific examples provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To expound', 'On the flip side', and 'In conclusion', though some transitions feel slightly mechanical. There is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. However, referencing is occasionally imprecise, such as the use of 'of whom' in the first paragraph, which does not correctly refer back to 'places'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the benefits from the disadvantages, which helps the reader follow the argument easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey their meaning clearly. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary, such as 'adrealine' (misspelled) and 'sacared' (misspelled). Other word choice errors occur, such as 'appeals to be delecious' instead of 'appears to be delicious'. While the range is sufficient to discuss the topic, the frequent spelling errors and occasional awkward collocations prevent the response from reaching a higher band. The vocabulary is functional but lacks the precision and sophistication required for a Band 7 or above.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('conditions for surviving is difficult', '70% of younger generation likes'), incorrect preposition usage ('journey to such destinations with lack of knowledge'), and awkward phrasing ('if it is not dealt in a timely manner'). While these errors do not impede overall communication, they are persistent throughout the text. A wider range of error-free complex structures would be needed to achieve a higher score.

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