Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.
What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Todays world the people like to enjoying the vacation more in african countries a specially dry areas, which is counted in dangers for living life. Although, the natural eruption warn the public to avoid to travel in different countries.
In contrast, if the visitor continue to travel such diverse area. That can benefits for economical and support them. The soiled area need more funds to grow it. However, the visitor spend money there, the country recived tax and individual get opportunity to live better. For instance, they suffers from the less water supplies that penny can you used in the to full filled their needs. Therefore, the living standard can be improved then the past situation.
It disadvantage for the community to plan to tour in war condition and naturally distrubtion. The near Sahara dessert one volcano erupted just few days ago that chemical reaction affecting the humans living life. For example, in covid time the people are travel the different countries the virus are spread very quickly. As a result, the globally the living life pieace and the persons loose their love ones.
To conclude, I supported to it is disadvantage for the living persons
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the prompt asks for both benefits and disadvantages of visiting difficult environments, the discussion is underdeveloped and lacks specific, relevant examples. The arguments regarding economic benefits and the risks of natural disasters are mentioned but not fully explored or supported with logical reasoning. Furthermore, the conclusion is extremely brief and does not adequately summarize the main points. Because the response is under-length and the ideas are not fully extended, it does not meet the requirements for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often unclear due to significant language errors. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In contrast', 'However', and 'Therefore', but they are often used incorrectly or do not logically connect the preceding and following sentences. For example, the transition between the economic benefits and the disadvantages is abrupt. The referencing is sometimes confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's train of thought. Overall, the lack of clear logical flow and the mechanical use of linking words hinder the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'soiled area' instead of 'underdeveloped region' and 'naturally distrubtion' instead of 'natural disasters'. The student struggles to use precise terminology related to the topic, relying on basic and sometimes confusing phrasing. The repetition of words like 'living life' and 'travel' further limits the range. To improve, the student needs to focus on learning topic-specific collocations and ensuring that words are used in the correct context to convey meaning accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent errors. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the people like to enjoying'), article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'That can benefits for economical'). Many sentences are fragmented or grammatically incomplete, such as 'Todays world the people like to enjoying...'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which makes the text difficult to read. The lack of complex structures and the high frequency of basic grammatical errors mean that the meaning is often obscured, preventing the reader from fully understanding the intended message.
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