Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this contemporary era, it is an undeniable fact that individuals are more curious to do something omnipresent in their life. Consequently, unknown places have been significantly explored by travellers. This phenomenon has its own pros and cons and those will be elucidated in the ensuing paragraphs.

From positive perspective, people can obtain an opportunity to feel the places where water is limited or extreme low temperature. For example, Men versus Wild, the discovery show in which Thomas wants to analyse the survival of human beings' life surrounded by wild animals and poisonous plants. Ultimately, it aids scientists and researchers to explore the forests. Apart from this, to fulfil their curiosity to come out from their comfort zone also drag them to this dangerous places. As a result, the value of actual life they can feel and it is a life lesson for them to how difficult to survive without zero amenities.

On the other hand, visiting these places may welcome detrimental effects into one's life. The first and foremost, one can die to fail to survive in extreme lowest temperature of -70 degree celsius in Antartic. In addition to this, people cannot reach there easily owing to inaccessible transportation. Moreover, to stay there is a another challenge in the absence of accomodation. All in all, lack of fundamental utilities unables someone to entertain themselves during their visits in Sahara desert.

In conclusion, just to fulfil one's curiosity visitors go above and beyond. Nevertheless, they should be encouraged to enjoy the other well-known tourist places which are safe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both the benefits and disadvantages of visiting extreme locations. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the example of 'Men versus Wild' is not clearly linked to the benefits for the average tourist, and the points regarding disadvantages (such as 'inaccessible transportation') are listed rather than fully explored. To reach a higher band, you should provide more detailed explanations of how these experiences impact the individual or society. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments lack the depth required for a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Consequently,' 'Apart from this,' and 'On the other hand.' However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and some transitions feel slightly forced. Referencing is generally clear, but there are instances where the connection between ideas could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the overall structure follows a standard essay format, which helps the reader follow your argument without difficulty.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'contemporary era,' 'omnipresent,' and 'detrimental effects.' However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'extreme low temperature' (should be 'extremely low temperatures') and 'unables someone' (should be 'prevents someone'). Some phrasing is slightly unnatural, which limits the precision of your expression. To improve, focus on learning collocations and ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical form.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'the value of actual life they can feel' (word order), 'to fail to survive' (should be 'failing to survive'), and 'is a another challenge' (article error). Punctuation is generally functional, but these recurring errors in subject-verb agreement and sentence construction occasionally impede the flow of your writing. Increasing your control over complex structures will help improve your score.

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