Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.
What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In this advanced pace life, most of the people are travelling places such as Sahara desert and Antarctic region where the risks are high related to everything such as weather conditions, food, shelter and many more. In this essay, there are some advantages also of living in these places along with the disadvantages which i will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with, if people are visiting the areas these areas then there are some good things which they will learn. The main benefit of visiting is they get knowledge about their culture and language. As, there are masses living with different languages and they also have their own culture which people only know while visiting there. Additionally, Some tourists visit such places only to collect some information about the land and how their habit and habitat is, they also know about the different animals and birds living there which will help them in their future study. Moreover, Antarctic region is only known about its beauty of glaciers and their animals such as penguins and polar bears. Because these are the only things which they learn when they visit such places. For instance, the study by Cambridge University showed that the students of the travel and tourism field understand their project and gets knowledge about the different geographical conditions of Antarctic when they visited that place and then they only understood how the animals are living in a very low temperature. So, going to the different tourist attractions is beneficial to know about different conditions.
On the other hand, there are some difficulties tourists face if they visit such places. The one reason is worse weather conditions. As, the Antarctic has a very low temperature which affects their health if the person have very low immunity as they easily get infected from many diseases such as fever, cold, cough and many more. The other is about the Sahara desert, people will face the problem of dehydration because the temperature of that region is so high which makes difficult to survive for the long time.
In Conclusion, there are both the advantages and disadvantages of these such tourist attractions as it gives you knowledge of different new things but it also puts your life in risk because of weather conditions.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both the benefits and disadvantages of visiting extreme locations. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. The discussion on benefits is repetitive, focusing heavily on 'knowledge' and 'learning' without exploring deeper aspects like personal growth or the thrill of adventure. The disadvantages section is more specific regarding health risks, but the argument remains somewhat superficial. While the prompt is addressed, the ideas lack the depth and nuance required for a higher band. The position is clear, but the supporting examples, such as the mention of Cambridge University, are slightly generic and could be better integrated to strengthen the argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To commence with', 'Additionally', and 'On the other hand', though some transitions feel a bit mechanical or repetitive. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the internal structure of the second paragraph is slightly cluttered, making the flow feel a bit disjointed at times. Referencing is mostly clear, though some sentences are slightly awkward, which occasionally impacts the smooth flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks sophistication. There is a reliance on basic descriptors like 'good things', 'many more', and 'different'. While there are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary such as 'geographical conditions', 'dehydration', and 'immunity', the range is limited. There are also some minor collocation errors, such as 'in this advanced pace life' (instead of 'in this fast-paced life') and 'habit and habitat' (which is used incorrectly in context). Expanding the range of synonyms and collocations would significantly improve the quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the Antarctic'), subject-verb agreement ('the person have'), and sentence construction ('the Antarctic has a very low temperature which affects their health'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the misuse of commas and sentence fragments occasionally hinders clarity. While the meaning is usually clear, the frequency of errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and article usage would be highly beneficial.
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